Black Poetry : LOCKED IN HER MIND

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  1. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    {This was a poem i wrote not to long ago about my ex best friends sister who had recently committed suicide!}

    HATEING HERSELF AND WHO SHES BECOME, HIDING IN HER HEAD NOT QUITE SURE WHAT FROM DAYS
    PASS ON SHE LIVES WITH REGRETS, LIVING WITH
    PAIN AND TO HERSELF MAKEING SUICIDAL THREATS
    TIME PASSING BY SHE STANDS STILL, NOTHING
    INSIDE, SHE DOESNT REALLY FEEL THE BIG BLACK WHOLE IS TAKING HER DEEP, SHE TRIES TO CLIMB OUT BUT THE WALLS ARE TOO STEEP SHE CAN NOT SPEAK OF THE PAIN INSIDE, INSIDE IT MUST STAY INSIDE IT MUST HIDE SHE IS REALLY LOST AND NEEDS TO BE FOUND, BUT SHE CANT SPEAK OF THE HURT, SHE CANT MAKE A SOUND, SHE DOESNT KNOW HOW TO GET OUT OR WHAT TO DO, NO ONE EVEN TRIES TO UNDERSTAND WHAT SHES BEEN THROUGH,

    SHE GAVE UP NOW, ABOUT ANYTHING SHE DOES NOT CARE, THE ONLY THING LEFT ON HER FACE IS TEARS AND A BLANK STARE DAMMIT! SHES NOT THEYRE ANYMORE WHY CANT YOU SEE?! SHE WANTED OUT, SHE JUST WANTED TO BE FREE, SHES BEEN GONE FOR A WHILE, GUESS YOU WERE TOO BLIND, SHE DIED IN A CAGE, LOCKED IN HER MIND!!! :confused:
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I hear ya baby, loud and clear. Powerful drop.
     
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    Happens too often, this sadness was well expressed. Threats are made, and a person will often check out of life in their minds long before the threat becomes real. smh
     
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    feeling all the emotion that flows within here i felt it deep speak on
     
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    I hear the anger and the questions why? This is a great piece! thank you for sharing.
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very strong write emotions ran..tight write
     
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    Antar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wurd
    losses of suicides are high costs
    thoughts never uncovered
    times never shared
    -disisgreat, sis

    One
     
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    Life can be fleeting may her soul rest with the assurance of salvation.

    :hearts1: :hearts1: :hearts1:
     
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    MADDRAPPER Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice poem got a lot of feelings and sadness into it well here's version

    Like a girl suicidal the world is vital and hurl like a tidal

    Wave from the Atlantic in the slum the panic is societal

    Empty feeling pound nails and hound females they need love

    Hate is like crowds of torpedoes or clouds of mosquitoes

    It bites and explodes the road to success loud and heats those

    Thoughts of giving up and living corrupt then commit self murder
     
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    IntuitioninMD Banned MEMBER

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    Suicide.

    I've studied suicidal behaviour from a cultural and gender point of view.

    To want death for yourself.. is a prison - may be of the worst kind.

    This is really really good.
     
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