Black Poetry : living in the past (supposed to be called maybe)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by NileReflection, Dec 12, 2003.

  1. NileReflection

    NileReflection Active Member MEMBER

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    Maybe it’s the way the wind caresses my body with your name, and causes my aura to shiver
    Maybe it’s the familiar way the rain used to fall when you and I would talk
    Maybe it’s the lingering warmth from when you used to hold my hand
    Maybe it’s the way the way you turned my body into the Sun and looked right through my soul
    Maybe it’s the fact that I still can’t let you go
    Maybe it’s the way you loved my mind and made love to me by fading moonlight, bringing me each and every star, singing me each and every psalm
    Maybe it’s the way you spoke, letting each word penetrate the invisible space between us
    Maybe it’s the way you showed me all of you, standing naked before me, trusting me with you entire Being
    Maybe it’s the way you eyes always traveled to mine, needing me when I needed you to
    Maybe it’s the fact that you are the realest, the closest I’ve ever gotten to total Bliss
    Maybe its your kiss, Drawing out through your lips the heaven I know that existed in you
    Maybe it’s the way you make my emotions erupt within my heart, spilling out within the circles of your arms
    Maybe it’s because I can make out your face in every cloud
    Or maybe it’s because I make-believe
    Maybe I really believe in you
    Maybe it’s because I’m just scared
    But I would like to think it’s because
    I love you
     
  2. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i am feeling these maybe
    nice drop
    Peace
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well felt and said just maybe !!!
    tyte write
     
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    Alpha Male Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Re: TO NileReflection

    Maybe this Maybe that
    What you wrote is a fact
    that maybe your words
    are real and make an impact
    good poem for it is real
    from you to me a real deal
    Maybe you'll continue
    Maybe you'll stop
    Know this NileReflection
    your poem is no FLop!
     
  5. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    feelin dis...
    nice drop
     
  6. LibertyLady

    LibertyLady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you are new here.....?

    i just readed another poem of you.....


    17 years old...... and youre poems speaks to me as if you had already 7 lives..



    keep writing poet...


    i,m real touched inside by this poem serius...

    sumthing that does not happen often





    liberty..
     
  7. NileReflection

    NileReflection Active Member MEMBER

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    Peace

    Peace brothas, and sistas,

    thnaks for all the positvity. I this particular poem i was trying out the repetitious style to enhance the poem. I have been checking out some other styles in this forum and i am learning a lot. Shri Sa Hetep (peace and blessings). let's keep writing and keep this revolution poppin', because the time is now peoples!!!!!

    -nile reflection
     
  8. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was simply beautiful. I particularly liked the line: Maybe it’s the way the way you turned my body into the Sun and looked right through my soul
    Keep writing.
     
  9. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Liberty is right you got the mind of a one beyond her own wisdom :)
    lovin the Maaaaaybe Baaaaby lol
     
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