Black Poetry : listening to the walls

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by deepy, Sep 1, 2004.

  1. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    so i be writing and washing...
    writing and washing...
    washing...seeing an image
    hurrying to put it down..
    the floors and the walls of the kitchen
    spit out at me..'CAN YOU SEE US...CAN YOU SEE US'
    so thunderous are there sounds

    .
    oven and stove are fine
    (can't stand a dirty oven)..
    but the walls
    screaming on me...and i did'nt hear..see
    grease had quietly put a thin layer on them
    so busy writing..
    so now i am washing...
    first i spray
    a layer to cut the grease
    and while it works
    I be running to my pad to write
    or checking on the familee..
    what do I see...
    erotica..and love and groping
    sorrow and sadness and dopin
    blakness is the way, but first
    let's jump into the hay.

    not today thank you
    .. you try
    talking to the kitchen walls..
    try tiptoeing around the floors...
    they be ready to bite ya...call you every kind of name

    'all that creative juice is fine my dear
    all that sharing love is nice...i fear
    you've forgotten that you eat in here..
    eat in here!...okay
    help us to look good and smell sweet..
    then make a salon and let them come
    to see us smiling like the sun
    share you poems and sing them songs
    \first wring that mop..and where your gloves..'

    "oh I like that line...i'd better right
    it down or i'll forget it"
    thus
    i be washing and writing..
    and washing and writing
    and washing...
    and washing
    and writing
    and.....






    (c)2004 - all poems by deepy are(c) whether stated or not..
     
  2. PurpleMoons

    PurpleMoons Administrator STAFF

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    (smilin) That was so delightful!!!!

    Got me over here smiling cause
    yes...yes...yes I understand
    what your'e meaning.
    One can get so caught up in
    their art but someone has to do
    the cleaning!!

    Loving this drop! :luvv:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    why this take me to my cleaning moments
    crossing thoughts i know what u mean ....
    wash and write on sis.
     
  4. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was creative..enjoyed it....
    i am painting walls ...lol as we speak
    nice drop!!!!

    Peace
    Angel
     
  5. Ireadastory

    Ireadastory Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Loved how you expressed the reality of creative thought and the process we go through not to lose that thought. Keep droppin it!
     
  6. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    There is such a story that can be told in how are poetic mements unfold, and we mold them onto the page....just as you so creatively did here. Scribe on, poet.
     
  7. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh yeah, this is a true original, sister. I dig this vibe and love the way you put it down.
     
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    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    this was a masterpiece and so original...wow
    you caught me off guard with this one...nice
    one love
    khasm
     
  9. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ...this was albiet a classic :spinstar:

    Great job Poet... :toast:
     
  10. THA HOOKUPMAN

    THA HOOKUPMAN Banned MEMBER

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    deep

    i felt this really your really lyrical , much love for your style ...peace and blessings :luvv:
     
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