Quiet Poetry Lounge : Limerick Poem Toward Personal and National Salvation

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by rasheed, Apr 16, 2004.

  1. rasheed

    rasheed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    When you come to the end of the day
    Fall down upon your face and pray
    You need a new beginning
    To hold you back from all your sinning
    Little man and woman made out of clay

    You must research and learn
    And excellent human dignity earn
    And not just continue to follow
    The empty and the hollow
    Or you'll find that in hell you will burn

    You're in for a royal screwing
    If you just do what your ancestors have been doing
    Without applying your power to reason
    To bring forth fruit in every season
    The Natural Creation is yet teaching and cueing

    You should try with all of your might
    To claim those things which are your right
    Despite the enemies plot
    To give you even less that what you've got
    You must rise up to your highest height

    Don't be afraid to question false religion
    Don't be afraid to make a better decision
    Satan wants to keep you doing his bidding
    Keep the true realities hidden
    So you won't progress into the True Submission

    So you won't realize your oneness with Creation
    So you'll miss out on your true elevation
    Concentrate your efforts toward The One
    And gracefully become
    The Blessed, Saved and Enlightened Nation
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    yes yes yes this touch me deeply like da nation of my soul
    tyte write
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Always did enjoy a good limerick, but this one has such a good message. Follow what you know, just don't fllow blindly, I'm feelin this.
     
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    prayer is what it's about. I'm not trying to fall by the side of the road...for in prayer I will remain.
    Your speech was very inspiring and enlighting, and my thanks goes to you...once again.

    knock-knock ...respect is at your door.
     
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    Loving it!
    Very nice flow
    and thought
    provoking!
    Loving It!
     
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    this is tight!! and I do agree with the message. too many just coast along and don't really live or try to live up to their potential. well felt.
     
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    YES!!!!!!
    THIS IS INDEED A VERY DEEP FLOW!!!!
     
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    rasheed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    $$RICH$$, watzinaname, queentswana, PurpleMoons, gempis, turtle1

    Thanks each and all for getting with this write and shouting back at me

    Peace and Blessings
     
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