Black Poetry : Limerick Challenge

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  1. river

    river Watch Her Flow MEMBER

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    Hi fambly,

    A limerick is a poem that is usually (but not always) humorous and has a rhyme scheme of
    a
    a
    b
    b
    a

    Ex.
    There was an old man named Quigg
    Who decided to buy a new wig
    It was not right at all
    It was one size too small
    And his head was two sizes too big
    (Author unknown)

    It's a fun genre to write in. Come on, you bards. Try your hand at it.
     
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    Their are sayings that go on & on
    With a black fist raised meaning on
    Then a soluted flat hand meaning off
    Well which one makes you soft?
    Choose now cause from here it's on
     
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    My mom just shot my top off
    Being a Leo in the hunt of prey cut off
    Never taking empathy over survival of hers
    Returning back home with laughters and cheers
    Mom then stakes her 1/2 while we fend for our own stuff
     
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    'baby get me that mercuracome' grandma's cure for everything
    but nanna, i only twisted my ankle 'don't worry it's good for everything'
    she would ask me to massage her scalp with a comb when her head felt rough
    then snatch it & get mad cause i didn't do it right, didn't massage it rough enough
    i was afraid of hurting grandma's tender head
     
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    There are some crazy folk I know
    who don't have anyplace to go
    So they come to Destees
    to mess with me-mes :p
    with their :huh: word flow.
     
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    Like sometimes we wear hair that's not ours
    Hours & Hours it takes to pain stakenly sew into your pours
    Not literally cause the french style supposedly makes it stick
    Also be layed just right kinda like a quick fix
    Anywho, the fro underneath is all yours
     
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    Her exclamations told me that she was a freak
    Though I found out she was a freak of the week
    although I first found her screw humdrum
    until she used her two thumbs
    to spread the crack of her two bum cheeks
     
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    In the heat of the night i came to offer a cool breeze
    surrounded by newbies wearing coofies and a few trees
    as i started to build and break down mathematical facts about blacks
    a lady way in the back said we were all born christians, so i said what about 11:26 in the book of Acts
    I guess some of us will never learn
     
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    Info-moetry though I like your read and the direction you took...for it to be a limerick the last line has to rhyme with the format of first rhyme scheme. AABBA is the rhyme scheme not AABBC...my suggestion would be just a change of one word the word "learn" change it to "see" or even change up the line to something like "I guess for some they the day will never seize", just to keep in line with the rhyme scheme...
     
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    Brothers and Sisters we must except the original preachers of Life

    We have been Brothers and Sisters ingraved for all to see for life

    As you know the truthseekers will discover the above dome

    Of knowledge sent to us from our mother’s home

    For right now and seeing the original story of life and the tithe she paid to stay alive for the living of

    Continuous acted out orbits of true strife. Not always coming out right. Already told to be lives lived

    By the help of our elders natural herbal spice (wisdome). Dome of beyond and current s of life.
     
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