Black Poetry : lil' brother..

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  1. Giovanni

    Giovanni Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ded. to my brother, Andrew, who's now with the U.S. Airforce.
    we're only 14mos. apart. I miss him and love him so much


    i threw on an old
    memory; hangin' off the back
    of your door.

    caught the scent of collect'd oils
    that permeat'd this fabric: frequently worn,
    cologne-beaten memories confined to my breathin' space.

    you wore that shirt when we went out
    & made our presence known to the evening.
    we thought us to be so cool; list'd our elements to chillin';
    a ten commandments for the vibe.

    funny how we organized what should've been so natural,
    but we were younger then;
    adolescents, consumed by Saturday kung fu marathons
    in our wash'd out pajamas, with karate characters fadin' in the fabric.

    I never really understood our bond, til I was old enough to appreciate it.

    but don't think I loved you late, 'cause I've always loved you;
    even when your biology was confined to dime sacs, nickel bags & ****** had you
    believin' "high" was a self-esteem.

    I'm not use to us goin' so long without speakin'.
    sometimes I cry 'cause you ain't here to talk to/ we talk through
    plastic phones, tallyin' time on the wall of our minds like cell wall hieroglyphics
    scribed by inmates, countin' down to their parole dates in roman numerals.

    you're miles away from me
    but your spirit's close, while i'm wearin' our old clothes,
    with our memories caught in fabric time.

    time's got me missin' what use to annoy me:
    corny jokes you purposely told, from the passenger seat,
    with the intention of me makin' those facial expressions that always made you laugh.

    we are brothers mistaken on the street
    as childhood friends who grew up knowin' each other's families,
    but our relationship goes deeper than that illustration.

    we took each other for grant'd; both of us with the thought
    that we had the rest of our lives to treasure those moments.
    but I miss them now, & find myself wearin' our clothes before your scent gets lost
    in the washload,

    but I'll never be able to fit your shoes.
     
  2. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Giovanni

    This is what I'm talkin' bout heah... mmm. mmm. mmmm. This is a re-read; ova & ova. Truly a sentimental piece, there's not only just one phrase or stanza that stands out here brotha. It's the entirety of each verse that consumes me & I love the way you weave your words choosing the strings of each meaning carefully before sewing them into your poetical garment. Brotha you -- like a few of the other famiy members here, have a rare talent to take folk on a journey to another world....

    Let me ask.... have you ever heard of a word called synesthesia....?? It's the opposite in description of anesthesia.... in actuality there is a human disease called synesthesia, yet I don't see it as such because of the label (disease), but there are people who have synesthesia -- what it is is when a persons' sensory perceptions in the brain are wired different from the norm.... so people may actually "taste" words, or "see" colors associated with letters of the alphabet, or "feel" music in certain parts of their bodies as it is being played -- unexplained, but it just 'is'....and they live life like that....

    This piece that you have written, gives me a brief encounter with a generic form of synesthesia, because there's a lot of things happening to each of my senses as I read through every line of this piece....

    Well written scribe poet!

    N2
     
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    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    GioV....

    This is on point!!!!

    Make sure he sees this man!!!!!


    :peace:
    GQ
     
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    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Giovanni,

    This is so touching. It's sad when we are not near the family/friends we love. Though I know its painful at times. I smiled though your entire poem. I have 4 brothers and I can recall the Karate Characters Pajamas :) I relate to not truly understanding the bond between siblings until older or apart from them. My sister and I are older now and more alike than we every thought. It's down right scary sometimes :laugh:
    I thank you so much for this piece. It made my morning. :)

    Poetically Turn'd Out!
    CCBSKYN :heart:
     
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    an apt description of sibling love...

    ...how maturity makes us appreciate what presence didn't. THANK YOU for sharing such an intimate part of you.

    beautiful.
     
  6. Giovanni

    Giovanni Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you all so much.. my brother and I, like I said, are 14 mos. apart.. when we were growin' up the understanding of our bond developed.. it got to the point where I didn't make many friends in school, 'cause I figured my brother's friendship was enough for me.. we are truely bestfriends.. we know how each other functions, everything we're thinkin', and we've seen each other cry.. i'm real careful not to cry in front of just anyone.. he was there to console me when I broke up with my girlfriend a while ago, the sista' I was in-love with deeply.. he was there through all that.. that's why, i'm almost finish with my book, "Mood Rings" a collection of poems.. i'm dedicating the book to him.. i love him alot.. about the book.. i'm goin' through INFINTIY PUBLISHING and the book is set to drop some time in March 2002. but thank yall again for the luv.. be easy..
     
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    This was beautiful...

    It brought up thoughts of me and my sister, almost made me cry!
    Thanks for sharing this!:)
     
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    Peace Gio...

    Yo, this wasn't a new joint was it? i mean, i thought i remembered hearing it before...but i never read it though. i went to okayplayer and read it and was like ****. this was beautiful and had me feeling all sentimental and isht. ;) really lovely piece and i'm glad that you are man enough to know your feelings and express them so clearly for your brother because you're right, the "...relationship goes deeper than that illustration..." i'm feelin' everything you wrote...that's one to grow on.

    1 L O V E

    peace and blessings unto you...
    always,
    anita j.
     
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