Black Poetry : Like Water Off A Duck's Back

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  1. cherryblossom

    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    I am never offended
    By any
    Who by actions or speech
    Lowly judge me and underestimate
    Because I can always tell by showing
    By trait and by weight
    That I am the best yet, the very pinnacle met
    When graced by my essence
    For my stance and my spine
    Have been seasoned by the throes and woes
    Of known and unknown ancestral generations
    Christened and baptized within His promised foundations
    So no foe could possibly make ME the lesser chick
    A snipped wick....Bluntly stunted
    And sadly mistaken are they who operate under this delusion
    For I am the blessed recipient of a lineal transfusion
    Their veins to mine intravenously shunted
    Lifting me up to be SHE, THE GREATER
    So, if I should choose, I can buy now and pay later
    Sponsored by mental and emotional sharecropping, my courage is fronted
    By those before me
    So I don't have to wait 50 years, RIGHT NOW is my Jubilee!
    Everything within me is their culminated rebirth
    Avenging all the slights meted to degrade what their lives were worth
    And for THEM, I speak what was once made mute
    Collectively, they are that proverbed tree and I am the fruit
    Pollinated by strength and hope
    So those naysaying and low-blow others
    Can't even imagine the depth and scope
    Of ME!
    No, I don't mind them at all
    They are the ones held in psychological thrall
    Fettered with chains fastened by ignorance
    While my mind is free
    A blood-stained but solid family crest, my defense
    Against them.
    So let them rail
    For in the end, they'll wail
    From the landing of my retribution
    As I blithely wage my one-woman revolution!
     
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    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Let it be known

    Awesome!

    Totally well poised and written:terrific:

     
  3. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    yes

    i'm not mad at you hanging on for dear life glued to a wooden plank out in the pacific ocean 2,000 miles from landfall

    that duck mentality does help water roll off the back more freely

    :terrific:
     
  4. cherryblossom

    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    LOL!

    So'ja, please point out to me where in this poem you extracted this analogy?

    Now, yes, the "duck" metaphor is in my title; but, somehow, you left my poem and put me in the movie "Cast Away!" ROFLMBO!

    You coulda at least let me have me the ball, "Wilson" to keep me company! :lol:
     
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    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    Moreover, So'ja, your comment is prime example of that very "division" I spoke of.

    You came into my poetry with the same mindset you have with me in the forums. You introduced YOUR views about MY views into the poetry forum and you used my POEM to do so.

    Your comment had nothing to do with my POEM but rather what and how YOU think of me and my views.

    Yeah, So'ja, where is all that so-called "love and respect" you have for me as your "sistah" now? LOL!

    You just busted yourself, brotha.


    And you're even a FORMER moderator for the Poetry Forum! You even CORRECTED me when I first posted in here. But, all I did was mention a grammar error....However, what YOU have done here is not even a "critique." It is a DELIBERATE passive-aggressive attack on my beliefs.

    SO'JA, YOU'RE A HYPOCRITE.

     
  6. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    lol you're very entertaining hahahahahahahaha you bring drama like baby mamas

    right you saw division, i said i appreciate you as a black woman
    if you are a black woman (i'm not saying you're not)

    so if you see division that's your reflection off of me


    where do you get this stuff

    now how did i say that here?,

    the 2,000 miles represented the isolation one may feel, that's what i felt why am i being crucified here?
    i saw defiance in your piece and the will to go on and my comment summed that up you said one woman revolution at the end of the poem and that's how that feels like you're out at sea all alone but the duck mentality helps by just letting it all roll off your back

    :haha: :haha:

    what does that have to do with anything? it's former anyway and i'm not into titles anyway

    i'm hypocrite? hahahahahahahahhahahahahahahahahaha

    :qqb020:

    i don't know where to laugh or cry lol

    listen i commented on your piece and you had meltdown why?

    because your work made me feel how it feels to stand in the face of defiance and never giving up your will to live

    like hangin on to wooden plank far from landfall with so much on you
    and using it like your title says using duck mentality and letting it roll off your back sometimes you need to do that for you i oversand that

    but because of that i'm a hypocrite lol

    :qqb020:

    :help:

    :?:

    you even say yourself the "duck" is in the title :?:
    :qqb020:

    let's do so psychology here

    why do you resort to name calling and/or labels like hypocrite?

    that's usually shows you have nothing else

    because truth never needs labels

    dang it's friday man

    have a great day
     
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    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    You try to play word games, So'ja, but I see right through ya.

    Cellophane shoulda been ya name.
     
  8. Da Street So'ja

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    um

    that's your reflection you see and you're name calling again and sign of lack of substance

    you can me a hypocrite yet your first comment to me was fine you never gave me a chance to answer your question

    then you came with Mr. Hyde complex

    now you mad at me
     
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    Very nice piece.....sis

    Poet's this not a discussion keep it poeticly and sister bashing a member calling him a
    HYPOCRITE was indeed a violation sis , do give apology and lets stay within da poetic flow

    Please I ask.
    Thank you in advance
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  10. cherryblossom

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    Where in my poem did you see “isolation?”

    So'ja, you had me on a “”HANGING ON FOR DEAR LIFE, GLUED to a WOODEN PLANK out in the Pacific Ocean, 2,000 miles from landfall.”

    That not only denotes “isolation” but DESPERATION.

    The scenario you drew was one of being desperate for HELP or being SAVED from my plight. And the LAST thing, I am, my brotha, is “desperate.”

    Moreover, NO WHERE IN MY POEM did I even allude to feeling “isolated” nor “desperate.”

    And just when have you ever seen a “DUCK” out in the Pacific Ocean on a wooden plank?!


    I said:

    *

    So, I'm standing TALL, my brotha. And I'm LEADING. I'M the one, OUT FRONT.

    AND I SAID:

    THEN, I SAID:
    Now, YOU being from NY may not be familiar with “sharecropping.”
    But, AGAIN, I am saying that I am BACKED UP and CO-SIGNED by all those before me!

    So, yet, AGAIN, I am clearly saying that I am NOT ISOLATED.


    Now, THIS is the only part applicable. Yes, I am, indeed, DEFIANT; and yes, I have the WILL and the FORTITUDE to go on, no matter what or who may stand in my way. So, THIS statement was, obviously, the better choice to make in your attempted explication.

    A “one-woman revolution” is NOT indicative of a being or feeling “isolated.” And, again, ALL throughout this poem, I am stressing just how much I am NOT ALONE.

    To be “a revolutionist” does not equal “ hanging on for dear life glued to a wooden plank out in the pacific ocean 2,000 miles from landfall.”

    So, just where in my poem did you glean that I am fighting a fight of “isolation” or feeling like I am all ALONE and literally DRIFTING in a vastness with no hope in sight?
     
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