Black Poetry : Like that Little Jackie song you like

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  1. jus_dat_nice

    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I think I liked you better before you knew me
    Like that Little Jackie song you like
    I liked you better before we got to know each other
    Back when you and me was still a new entity
    When you kept saying "I love you"
    So I would respond in the like
    Just so you could be sure that I still loved you too

    I think I liked you better before you knew me
    Like that Little Jackie song you like
    I liked how we could say nothing and it would be enough
    I liked the excitement in your voice whenever you heard from me
    And no matter what you always wanted to hear more about me
    How you used to kiss me on my neck cuz it made me giggle
    Then you'd tell how much you loved my laugh

    I think I liked you better before you knew me
    Like that Little Jackie song you like
    I liked that you loved my hair when it was long and red
    But didn't say a thing when i cut it all off and dyed it blue and black
    Just that blue was your favorite color
    I liked how you would always lay me on your chest
    Because that's how i found out our hearts beat on the same rhythm
    I liked how you used to sing to me, even though you know you can't sing
    Just because it made me smile

    I think I liked you better before you knew me
    Like that Little Jackie song you like
    But maybe I tainted you or something
    Because your not like that anymore
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    I think i like u better before u knew me ...that line made a splash
    and spoke deep , i enjoyed your artistic scribe here ...............
     
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    sweet apple*pie Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I really enjoyed this a great deal...it made me...think.

    I like things that make me think....

    really nice.
     
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    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for the love!!!

    $$$RICH$$$:i wish i could take credit for that "i liked you better before you knew me" line but it was actually straight out of a Little Jackie song. it inspired me to write this one.

    sweet apple*pie: im glad i helped begin a thought process and i'm glad you enjoyed my work
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow. Perhaps sometimes we're better off when we're just ourselves, instead of being what others expect of us. Tight write.
     
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    mizjoice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    familiarity breeds contempt....so the saying goes....your poem had a nice flow to it......and created solid images...good write
     
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    Harry Hyman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Jus_dat_nice - I absolutely love the clarity this expresses. It's an indictment against relationships that have lost that "something" that was present and wonderful at its beginning. It is the power of the poet's pen that lets us look into that window and perhaps see a little of our own truth and loss. You did real good with this one Jus_dat_nice when you crafted it. Hats off! Namyh
     
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    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :) :) :) once again, thank you everyone for your love andf input :) :) :)
     
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    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I enjoyed how you gently convey the sense of a shift in a relationship.


    Nice flow!


    MaddSistahlyLove!
    Coco:heart:
     
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    jus_dat_nice:
    I so enjoyed this it really made
    me reflect on somethings. Like how
    and why does that happen?
    Perfectly Expressed!!!

    Much Luv
     
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