Quiet Poetry Lounge : Like Honey For Sugar

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Sha'iyn, Apr 17, 2008.

  1. Sha'iyn

    Sha'iyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    We were from two different combs of honey serving the same bee
    I was never a drone, I was a soldier for my Queen

    I met you while I was buzzin' you were bumblin' on the humble
    we both were at a loss for words and talk sounded jumbled
    does this mean 'I love you' or I'd love to.. rub you
    we fly around flowers and your sweet nectar makes me hug you

    your phermones attract me and I promise I won't sting
    we gravitate in mid-air while blue jays sing

    The sun brings life and the moon does to
    we float around roses and the scent makes me hug you
    with the morning comes dew and a feeling of 'I miss you'
    distance away makes me impatient for the moment I can kiss you

    I dissed you one day, at a glimpse when love was lost
    love came back and made me say "Where were my thoughts?"

    I ended meeting a wasp with long dark wings
    we had physical attraction but, nothing in between
    Mother Nature please give me my honey back
    I still taste the honey from her back when we're in the sack

    I saw her around some Hornets and I know they're just horny
    She looked through those eyes and turned and ignored me

    it almost destroyed me, annoyed me, and hurt
    Because noone else on this Earth can quench my thirst
    for some of her Honey

    Sha'iyn aka Shuga Shane
     
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    Certainly enjoyed the word play surrounding the honey and the bees. Stay clear of those wasps, hopefully she'll send those hornets packing, and the two of you can be each other's honey again.
     
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    Honey hide and sweet yamz this was tyte and sugary
     
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    Hey Sweet thang....
    I get so gitty when I see a poerty post from you.
    Sha'iyn, this little honey dew was terrible sweet
    and endearing. I hope your honey buzzes
    back your way. I so enjoy this, I almost flowed back:)


    Much Luv
     
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    uncrossing my legs now.........smoking write.......:qqb023:
     
  6. Sha'iyn

    Sha'iyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sweets for my sweets,

    it's all about the birds and the bees. i'm glad ya'll liked this lil' write of mine. watz, your responses are always positive (like Paula Abdul's), Rich is the ghetto Simon Cowell, and 4ever and nevar remind me of Mary Mary on Sunday's Best, both beautiful ladies with so much to offer a brotha.

    thank you from the pit of my soul.[/[/SIZE]
     
  7. PLATINUMILLITY1

    PLATINUMILLITY1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wonderful Honey Bee analogy
    Flow on peot
    Skiiillls Bro
     
  8. Tha-Emissary

    Tha-Emissary Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Now this here Beezzz really Hot! The molding of this poem was as sweet as the intricate design of a honeycomb and I think your parallel points to nature and people were right on! You definitely harvested some sweet masterpiece!
     
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    The title of your piece reminds me of a movie "Like Water for Chocolate". This was a great piece and I loved the analogy of love and romance in comparison to honey and sugar!
     
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    Hi Shaiyn
    I enjoyed the delicate flow of this poem
    It is just right for Spring. Love is sweet
    like the honey your spoke of. and like all good
    soliders you have to guard it with your heart
    this was a very beautiful poem to me
    realting to the essence of finding and keeping and love
    Awesome!

    Peace
     
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