Black Poetry : like a rose

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by bahati, Jul 2, 2003.

  1. bahati

    bahati Active Member MEMBER

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    You - The Rose
    Your Sweet Scent
    Filled The Room
    You - The Symbol Of Love
    Full Of Grace
    And Pride
    Tempting And Seductive
    I Dared To Touch You
    Dared to Pick You
    Was All Wonderful
    Happiness
    In Full Blossom
    Even When The First
    Raindrops Fell
    In A Careless Moment
    Touched You In The Wrong Way
    Ran One Of Your Thorns
    Right Into My Flesh
    Where It Would Stay
    Until Torn Out
    Under Unbearable Pain
    Leaving A Deep Wound
    Healing Eventually
    To Leave A Clearly
    Visible Scar
    That Will Remind Me
    Of You -
    ETERNALLY

    miss you still J.
     
  2. Rico

    Rico Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was nice...I like it. Like the flow of it. Welcome to Destee!
     
  3. Rico

    Rico Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was nice...I like it. Like the flow of it. Welcome to Destee!
     
  4. PlayWitItPimp05

    PlayWitItPimp05 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    First of all, lets get this thing started off right.

    :wave: :kiss: :party: :star: :rolling: :star: :party: :kiss: :wave:

    WELCOME, WELCOME,WELCOME!!!

    Let your light shine as bright
    As the stars on a cloudless night
    May your words take flight
    In your poetry!!!

    We are glad to have you here, and hope to see you grow.

    Second of all, this poetry was beautiful!!
    Hope to hear more soon!!

    :heart: :heart: PLAY :heart: :heart:
     
  5. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ahhhhh...but for the beauty of a rose. THANK YOU for allowing us to experience the aftermath of such beauty.

    WELCOME to the playground.
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Great flow :)
     
  7. bahati

    bahati Active Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the warm welcome and the positive responses. for those of you who liked it let me tell ya there will be more. for those who didn't like my poem oh well ;-)
     
  8. Khasm13

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    bahati...don't even worry about people
    that don't like your poetry
    you should do this for self
    and no one else...word is bond

    your poem is tight
    sweet lost love looks like a rose
    i know
    cause i had one of those
    that left my heart froze...
    keep scribing
    peace
    khasm
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome welcome !!

    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome from above as i bless u in love
    welcome to da family of bond in poetic scribe
    welcome dis flow of roses u pose
    tyte continue :D :wave: :wave: :wave:
     
  10. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Bahati, this was scribe was beautiful...great imagery, very touching especially this part:
    "Healing Eventually
    To Leave A Clearly
    Visible Scar
    That Will Remind Me
    Of You - "
    ETERNALLY

    Felt you on this!
     
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