Black Poetry : lights out

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Blkthunder, Nov 8, 2002.

  1. Blkthunder

    Blkthunder Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I woke this mornin with a pain in my chest
    the kind that comes from not gettin your rest
    to make things worst the lights were out
    depression wanted one more bout
    I reached up to change the light that blew
    in that moment came a vision tru
    god was the light that appeared to be out
    when in fact his energy surged throughout

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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    yes yes yes!!!! when we open up to him
    so forth he come unto us wit da brightest light !
    nice flow
     
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    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    well where do i start?
    the concept of the poem was really good
    the poem was also written very well and i enjoyed the read

    my only prob with it is that i think it could be better
    i think you should write it over and add more to it
    but thats just my opinion
    (maybe thats just cause i wanted to hear more)

    good work
     
  4. Ladysoul

    Ladysoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very very nice! great metaphor, and like Lonelypoet, I would not mind hearing more of it.
     
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    Jyntlbreez Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yep, that's right..
    Sometimes, and as obscure as it may seem...His light continues to shine upon us!
    Good Poem!
     
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    loved it feeling this
     
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    Natasha Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    even when we cannot see Him , or even feel Him ....He is always there
    Natasha :heart:
     
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    Blkthunder Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thankx all
     
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    wildflower7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    how did i miss this gem?
    i LOVE it!! :spinstar:
     
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