Black Poetry : Life Struggle

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  1. flojo

    flojo Active Member MEMBER

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    Grazing on the grass
    of a greener pasture,
    seems as though
    its only an irrational dream
    in the mind of a witless child

    Fighting for air
    from a reckless current
    which holds me under
    the reach of success
    Struggle...Breathe
    Struggle...Breathe

    Feeling my grip weaken
    Fighting to hold on tight
    to what's left of pride
    Chest out
    Chin up
    My fears, I hide

    Fleeing aimlessly
    through a jungle of existence,
    as I have fallen prey to
    and therefore am
    continulously stalked by
    the master of defeat

    Drawing upon a strength
    greater than my own
    obtaining a shield of descernment
    and a sword of wisdom
    I plunge forward
    cloaked in an armor of humility

    Pacing my diligence
    lest I become weary,
    at last in my sight
    beams my prize,
    the object of my
    perseverence
    Struggle...Breathe
    Struggle...Breathe
    Struggle...Breathe
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sounds like you're winning the struggle, by sheer will. This was a strong scribe of determination. Well felt and written. Nice to read you again.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    indeed the struggle is heavy but together we shall defeat da odds
    this was very well said keep speaking !
     
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    I always love a great poem that speaks of "Survival"...
    this is one of the best pieces I've read of you...

    Wonderful...

    Thanks for gracing our page with such inspiration! :toast:
     
  5. flojo

    flojo Active Member MEMBER

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    Thank you so much! It's always inspiring to hear good things about my poetry from those whose poetry inspires me. :wave:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    most welcome u bring a positive vibe to grasp too
     
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    this is a great poem
    to me it is saying
    don't give up
    Peace
     
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