Black Poetry : life seems but a sunset

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  1. moham

    moham Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Life seems but a sunset

    Years of endless discovery
    a constant raging battle
    feeling fatigue every now and then.
    Still….,
    still wait patiently for the sun to rise
    for just once in a lifetime
    when all I did was compromise
    hard to distinguish the truth from the lies.
    Every period leaving behind a distinct mark
    seems dusk keeps calling upon the dark.

    Look for my Father’s substitute
    who was promised to me at birth
    even before i entered this earth
    if only you could be like the Heavenly one
    make my sun rise, know me through and through
    know the essence of the daughter that
    was promised to you.

    Representation for half of My creation
    mere acceptation got me running
    circles of frustration, clouding my perception.
    You were supposed to mould my eyes
    make my stars rise high above the skies
    but disrupted harmony increased my agony,
    the beginning of my sun setting.

    Wanted you to enlighten my view
    See a father, teacher, a man in all his glory
    Discover all of this beauty in you
    But man figure out of sight
    Got me looking for that fundamental
    light, in those who looked alike
    to be mine in storm and shine.
    Blessed so(u)lely by the Devine,
    we would sing love songs till dawn.
    And so dawn came,
    but neither their hearts nor faces
    were the same.

    The solidness of my soul
    crumbled between their cold fingers
    Left behind (again) weeping and regaining
    disillusioned without a sense of direction
    scraping every splinter back together.
    Run away broken and humiliated
    deeply scarred and barely naked
    to disappear into the comfort of the darkness.

    The time has come to move on west
    Find my bearings and redefine my quest
    Will try not to look back once
    I might freeze and turn to salt
    Blaming life for all of man’s faults
    happiness come shine my way
    all the while wait patiently for that day
    life won’t seem to be
    just setting on me.
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It'll be your time to shine...just wait on the light, for darkness don't last always.
    this is an awesome piece. I enjoyed reading and *watching and *waiting for more, nice job poet.
     
  3. moham

    moham Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I won't stand still and just wait for things to change, but yes I'll wait for that day everything falls in place.
    Thank you for the read and the words, Queen.

    moham
     
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    I do feel you most immensely. Sometimes I just get sick of carrying the loads that I do. Thank you for reminding me to keep the faith. Much love to you
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    sometime all the weight can be heavy and we all get tired of it too.
    this speaks much to me
     
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    gempis said it ..
    thanks for reminding me to keep the faith...through it all...
     
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    moham Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I feel I have no other choice "then to head west".
    But sometimes it is hard to stay positive and thank you for acknowledging that. Really!!

    Some people think that when you speak of your loads and you feel like you've had it, you're not positive. On the contrary. I'm positive, but I'm also human, so I'm honest about it when I don't feel so positive.

    And still I feel like I have no other choice then to stay positive and to keep the faith.

    Thank YOU.....gempis, Rich and deepy!!!!

    Much love to you too.
    moham
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Poet...this was awesomely inspirational...
    I second all the words spoken before me
    ..there are no words that I could add
    to really do this piece justice...

    Just know that it was felt immensly...
    Sage
     
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    this was an intense scribe sis...
    much love on your quest west...
    reality is not 100% negative...it is what it is...
    thanks for laying it down like this....
    one love
    khasm
     
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    moham Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank You for feeling with me Angel and Khasm!!!
    And I must say the warmthe you give is heartfelt.....really...no joke.....


    (this site is so nice..... :grouphug:

    greets
    moham
     
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