Black Poetry : Lie of leisure

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Antar, Feb 25, 2004.

  1. Antar

    Antar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    the river of you
    strong and true
    depend on you for support
    when things in my life are dark
    give me something to hold on to
    when my hands is empty-my heart is hurting
    produce positive feelings in me
    when i'm being pessimistic
    give me hopeful light of insight so i can see
    push me closer to being optimistic
    develops my regular features
    boosts my market value
    solidifies my self in sections
    that may have been confused as see-through
    you hard to touch
    but i gotta keep you
    nobody might not think about you a lot
    since you kinda gone
    or suspended on the same page you was on
    when i get our time out together
    i can weather the world
    permits me to see through the mists
    that drive me to fits
    working my self-same til frenzy
    no alibi when a wind blows action by chance
    my acts are exact
    and my reactions are even enhanced
    your direction is clear
    our beings of the same perfection
    to exist
    in dwellings with inhabitants that wish to
    hinder this
    when a fact is the combinations of all
    our bits is limitless
    my thoughts finishless
    give my mind peace
    when it can attend no rest
    give my body comfort when it can't
    withstand more fitness
    align my thinking with finesse
    so i carress
    all of the posibilities
    that we come up with
    connect
    deeper
     
  2. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this poem
    very smooth
    connection
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
  3. Twofish

    Twofish Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "so i carress
    all of the posibilities
    that we come up with
    connect
    deeper"

    impressed...
    2fish
     
  4. Heartstarter

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    Enjoyed

    Nice write.
     
  5. Antar

    Antar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanx

    ---gracious gracias---

    1
     
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    rasheed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Antar,
    Very nice write with liquid flow, enjoyed the read.

    Peace and Blessings
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sounds like two as one, this was a beautiful flow.
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i just had to come back
    this is a nice read :) poet
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
  9. Antar

    Antar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    one

    thanks for the love...
    the memory draws me closer
    the majesty of what you be
    is actually a deeper part of me
    my heart's hard to start
    when we lie (lay) so far apart


    ONE LOVE Famlee!!! :flame:
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    DEEP my brotha :) so ummmm when ya gon drop this for the famlee on the mic via VOICE CHAT :) :D