Black Poetry : Letting Go (For Peter)

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  1. Cindy

    Cindy Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I stood there
    At the end of it all
    Your funeral
    Thinking how

    Someone once told me
    Don’t get too high
    Your string might break
    And I didn’t know why

    Until they explained it
    And now
    I stand here
    Holding a string

    To a balloon
    Such as your spirit
    Such as my memories of you
    Such as an air lifted piece of my heart

    And I can’t let go
    No, I can’t turn it loose
    Although, I do want to see it soar
    I can’t turn loose

    Of you.
     
  2. iwannabe

    iwannabe Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like how you put things in this poem. Too the point, yet deep. Made for a great understanding of the speakers(your) emotion in this poem and feeling. I liked the metaphor of the string too. Good poem sista
     
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    very well expressed cindy nice drop
     
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    Cindy
    this was such a gentle and loving dedication and at the same time expression of your emotions.
    I know how you feel.
    I feel like this every single day since my grandMother passed away.....
    very nice.

    :heart: moham
     
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    thank God we have the gift of memories
    else we would truly be "letting go."

    let go the pain of loss to allow
    sweet memories to soothe.


    this read is bittersweet for me
    it's sad content, yet its a pleasure
    to read you again.

    a heartfelt read... thanks for sharing

    Coco :)
     
  6. watzinaname

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    Such an appropriate metaphor you used, the balloon on a string that you just can't let go of. I felt such sadness in this piece poet.
     
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    NICE DROP CAN'T WAIT TO READ MORE
     
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    Nice way of expression the inner conflict of loves hold.:D
     
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    it hard to let go something you hold so dear nice write.
     
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