The Front Porch : Letter From a Deadbeat to His Son

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[The same reason people read novels, and watch movies. They don't watch a drama and walk away saying that they were disappointed because the events weren't real. If the stories is good, then it should not be sold short because it's just a story. In fact that is the main reason actors act - they do it to ensure that they make the story as real as possible. I am sure that this piece is real enough to the person that is actually dealing with this situation.

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how do we know anything anybody says on here is real?

Peace Poetpreacher,


I like your writing style.. it has a really natural conversational flow to it.
If you were to match it with a more real depiction of this scenario, you could really bring some truth to the surface. This what you've written here is very very conservative.. very safe.. and well known.. it's to the point that one can predict the entire line of thought from the second sentence on. If this is fiction, why not take it somewhere unexpected.. or, at least.. less-expected?


- peace again.. and welcome..
Peace Poetpreacher,

I like your writing style.. it has a really natural conversational flow to it.
If you were to match it with a more real depiction of this scenario, you could really bring some truth to the surface. This what you've written here is very very conservative.. very safe.. and well known.. it's to the point that one can predict the entire line of thought from the second sentence on. If this is fiction, why not take it somewhere unexpected.. or, at least.. less-expected?


- peace again.. and welcome..

Point well taking, I know this happens a lot and is often overlooked so I wanted to keep it simple and to the point. I want when a young man who has grown up without a father reads this, the words have enough weight to express how the father is feeling.
 

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Point well taking, I know this happens a lot and is often overlooked so I wanted to keep it simple and to the point. I want when a young man who has grown up without a father reads this, the words have enough weight to express how the father is feeling.
Then if that's the case, maybe it's not enough to just say that your father was that way and then for you to regret the fact that you yourself are following in those footsteps. How about reaching back into your story to find out why your father was that way? How about revealing the social, psychological and possibly historical realities that made your father that way that were in turn passed to you that you are trying to break? Was your dad just a sorry man or are their roots to his behavior?

I'm a writer too!:toast:
 

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Good point James, as I said before I am just finding by way around this site. I'm used to just posting my stories and people who the stories affect would comment. I didn't know that there was a protocol to differentiate between fiction and non -fiction. I will make a notification in future post.
It's not a "protocol." It's dishonest if you don't. You accepted all those "like" confirmations and posts of praise for what others thought was your LIFE, not your "writing style." You mixed fact with fiction WITHOUT the readers' knowledge, and that's not cool. Black children, children's social/emotional development, the black family and consequently, the mental health of the black community, are important. They should be treated in that same vein - as vital. Not as an accolade-hungry con man's shell game.
 

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It's not a "protocol." It's dishonest if you don't. You accepted all those "like" confirmations and posts of praise for what others thought was your LIFE, not your "writing style." You mixed fact with fiction WITHOUT the readers' knowledge, and that's not cool. Black children, children's social/emotional development, the black family and consequently, the mental health of the black community, are important. They should be treated in that same vein - as vital. Not as an accolade-hungry con man's shell game.
basically what i was thinking…..
 

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Dang....y'all feelings was that hurt when you found out it was fiction? LOL!
 

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Too many are on board with themselves to ever want to be unified; unity comes to those who want it, but for those who don't, they only seek to divide the unified.
All I can and should advise and suggest: Who is friend or foe, will be revealed by both the deeds as well as their words...

Otherwise, I weigh the pros and cons, as regards those who agree with me, or don't, neither implying or suggest I automatically place them in the first category, rather than the second...

Good people are here...

Some of my shortcoming etc. they've forgiving and I've done likewise...

Do give them the benefit of the doubt, as we've already given each other...

FYI...
 

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