I was able to etch out a rhythmic line to your words.. though, this is really really rough.. just feeling it out.. seeing where it could go. Right now it's feeling like a duet.. where your verse is a response to the woman's first verse where she embraces her independence. This verse attempts to make amends.. next verse should be her response.. ( MsInterpret.. help us out..)
anyway.. give it a listen or two.. and share your thoughts about the direction.. content.. whatever.. the performance is just to illustrate the song.. I'm more of a song writer than a singer.. my style is limited and I usually make a conscious effort to step outside of my personal singing style during the creation process.. that way my vocal limitations don't limit the song.
anyway.. so the way I've done this in the past is this: we highlight what resonates with us. Whatever submit to me, I will try just as you wrote it.. and I'll submit my feedback with the completed performance.. and then the loop starts again.
alright.. so let me know... and think about a storyline. My first thought after performing your lyrics was that this was a male remix/response record or interlude.. or maybe even a prequel interlude to the song.. then it goes into her whole spiel.. I don't know.. we'll see.. the beauty about Art is that you can do it all the ways you want.. each one becomes it's own thing..
- peace
Peace
I just got a chance to listen to it and it sounded pretty good. Go head bro. Skuds, a.k.a. Donell jones....