Black People : Let's write a song together.

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  1. skuderjaymes

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    Doesn't matter if you have ever wrote a song.. or if you play or sing.. just throw in your ideas.. general or specific.. and I will try and fold them into the song..
    Whatever comes out belongs equally to everyone whose ideas were incorporated..
    This is basically a remix/extension of a song I wrote and recorded years ago. It was a collaboration with a friend entitled, "Never Again". The music be exactly the same.. but what I want to focus on are the lyrics. Although I can write many more versions of this song on my own.. I enjoy collaboration.. and my favorite projects have been collaboration projects.
    So let's try it here on Destee...

    I want to keep the opening chunk of my original song as the direction of the song..


    It goes:

    First Verse:
    Since you've been gone babe,​
    I made a change,​
    I'm no longer,​
    Afraid, Afraid.​
    I made up my mind that,​
    Never again,​
    Will I let another,​
    Define,​
    Who I am,​
    Chorus:
    And I'll Never,​
    **Never Again,​
    Will I ever,​
    **Ever Again,​
    Let another,​
    **Define who I am,​
    Never No more,​
    **Never again,​
    Ever again.​


    So in that same vein.. I'd like to add a second verse and a third verse.. keeping the same theme of self-empowerment.. self-realization.. toward the an affirmation of strength and rebirth.. but without bashing the other side.. This song is written for a women to perform.. but when you reach deep enough into the specific, what you find is the universal.. and suddenly what you made can be applied to anyone.
    So what I'm looking for is ideas.. fragments of ideas.. in lyrical form.. or not..
    whatever you think should be included throw it out.. and the process will be like this..
    what resonates with us we will use, what does not we will leave with no negative comments whatsoever.. so we throw a bunch of stuff at it and see what sticks.. and that'll be that.
    After we have the lyrical story together.. I'll put the music track up and patch it all together..
     
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    **Raises hand!!!!** Will this track be used solely for us on Destee? Or do you have other plans for it?
     
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    Well.. you know.. it's a public forum that doesn't require a login to see the content.. so if it's here, it's everywhere. There's no real way to control what happens to what you put out in the public. It is what itis. My intentions only go as far as sharing a collaborative space with other people here in this thread.

    I'm an Artist.. I make music on a regular basis.. like everytime I pick up my instrument.and I do it because it is in me to do it. And the only reason I'm proposing this here now is because doing things together feels good. And I don't know that everyone knows that.

    -that's the full extent of my plans.

    Same as with the Let's write a story together thread..
     
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    MsInterpret...

    check out soundcloud.com ... setup a free account and you can just speak your contribution.. then post it in this thread.. and the story thread also... might save you some pain.
     
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    here's a rough recording of the first part.. don't judge my vocals.. this is just to let you hear how it goes.. The final version will be sang by a woman.. this is a girl song...






    - peace.
     
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    peace

    2nd verse:

    I took a deep look within
    saw an empty space
    that you used to fill in
    so trust me when i say 'never again'
    i finally figured out
    that you are my best friend
    yes, my one and only
    the only one that i want to hold me
    it's cold and I'm so lonely
    you used to warm my heart
    but my foolish pride just tore us apart
    but i've grown
    I'll be here when you're ready to come back home
    I miss you

     
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    Peace Info-moetry,

    thanks for joining up..

    I'll put up a recorded version of this as is later... and send it back to you to smooth out lyrically..
    I just did a quick version of it.. and it flows well..

    hey.. if you can.. setup a soundcloud account and follow me.. it greatly eases the creative workflow..


    peace again...
     
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    Cool.............:piano:
     
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    peace

    signed up under Bro. Info and looking for you right now....
     
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    I was able to etch out a rhythmic line to your words.. though, this is really really rough.. just feeling it out.. seeing where it could go. Right now it's feeling like a duet.. where your verse is a response to the woman's first verse where she embraces her independence. This verse attempts to make amends.. next verse should be her response.. ( MsInterpret.. help us out..)

    anyway.. give it a listen or two.. and share your thoughts about the direction.. content.. whatever.. the performance is just to illustrate the song.. I'm more of a song writer than a singer.. my style is limited and I usually make a conscious effort to step outside of my personal singing style during the creation process.. that way my vocal limitations don't limit the song.

    anyway.. so the way I've done this in the past is this: we highlight what resonates with us. Whatever submit to me, I will try just as you wrote it.. and I'll submit my feedback with the completed performance.. and then the loop starts again.

    alright.. so let me know... and think about a storyline. My first thought after performing your lyrics was that this was a male remix/response record or interlude.. or maybe even a prequel interlude to the song.. then it goes into her whole spiel.. I don't know.. we'll see.. the beauty about Art is that you can do it all the ways you want.. each one becomes it's own thing..

    - peace
     
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