Black Poetry : Let You in My World

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  1. shaneak

    shaneak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Let me tell you of a day old dream. Stitched at the seams.
    Fine lines, Undefined
    By the patches of a bright colored quilt.

    I sing the song of pain. . .My body is mentally drained.
    Guided into the thickening of the forest.
    In the distance I hear a chorus. . .
    Singing my sad songs. . .Where do I belong?

    Am I seen; yet not heard.
    Are my words like ridicule. . .Simply an annoying verse.
    That I just rehearse. . . to be ignored.

    My triumphant plea. . .For sensibility. . .
    I'm a stranger in the late night.
    Seeking to do right. . .For wrong is not in my vocabulary,
    But on the contrary. . .Can you see what I see?

    To feel and know it's real.
    To cry and know why.
    To comprehend and understand.
    To love and never to hate
    To dream, dreams into reality as if it was fate.
    Let me let you into my World.

    Shaneak ****rell

    Copyright ©2001 Shaneak ****rell
     
  2. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Now uhhhhh, do I need key to get into this poetically correct world?

    tight!

    one love,blak
     
  3. Desert Storm

    Desert Storm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Set this One Up!

    Yes,yes,gurl,I hear ya now ! Don't hold back! Let it flow!
    Desert Storm
     
  4. shaneak

    shaneak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    LOL

    Blakverb: You don't need to get in mine. That's what make us different. In our writings...in our thoughts. For we as poets...create our own worlds. ;) But I'll be glad to tell you of mine...Let you see what I see at the different angles of this poetically correct world. :) Thanks for the compliment.

    Desert Storm: Girl all I can say is...I'm trying. To let if flow that is. I have some others but...I'm not sure i want to post them...

    Thanks guys!!! :)
     
  5. LISTERSCRIBIN'

    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    quite nyce, dear poetess...yes, indeed.
     
  6. shaneak

    shaneak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank You!!!
     
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    Hunter Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Gurl...

    You better go head and post those scribes!!
    I, for one am anxiously waiting! :)

    Digging your flow

    *Shane-ique* ;)
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    INTO YO POETICALLY WORLD
    I SIT AND LISTEN INTENTLY
    SPEAK ON !
     
  9. shaneak

    shaneak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Keep Postin

    Thanks for the encouragement. I have a tendency to get shy sometimes. But...I'll keep postin.
     
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    GYPSYMAN Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hhmmmmmm....

    This had a strangely haunting effect on me after going through it several times...I feel strangely familiar with the mood you created here..."unexplainable" at this time...
    perhaps after sleep and a...certain type of dream...
    My compliments to your mood creating and thought provoking talents.

    On a continuous journey
    GYPSYMAN
     
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