Black Poetry : Let me tell yall wha happened to me today...

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  1. PlayWitItPimp05

    PlayWitItPimp05 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Trying to clear up this writer's block a mine...yall bear wit me)


    Today in a store I saw da finneessst brotha...
    But I knew I didn't have what it took to be made his lover
    I mean this man was beautiful from the dreadz down to da Air Force I's
    had me sayin oh my oh my how come I couldn't be da one
    when I first laid my pupils across his pretty face
    my mouth hung open and watered like I was begging for a taste
    my hands automatically went up to my waist
    and it felt like my eyes were being graced
    with his serenade...
    delicious looking like a tall glass of lemonade...
    my lips stuck out farther than my natural pout
    he had dat whip appeal oh this i couldn't doubt
    He was a cocoa brown brotha with dreads wrapped up
    dressed like a thug but i knew it was outta love
    of style and not because he was stuck to these streets
    he looked like he could sit back and enjoy
    a nice meal of roots for dinner with a black soul sistah with dessert
    he looked like he could indulge himself in poetry
    and make mad love passionately
    and the next morning have a breakfast all naturally
    I kept thinking just what is Carolina feeding this man
    Because this man really did have the upper hand
    this man brought out
    every single one of my imperfections
    Suddenly I regretted ever having permitted a permanent to ruin my natural mane
    knowing my demonic subconscious which i could not tame
    was pushing to win this round
    i could feel the awkwardity stewing within me
    until I started sweating it out through every pore in my body
    and yet i didn't know quite what to do
    wanted to approach but i knew it was impossible
    then i thought oh ish he's about to check out...
    confusion ran through my cranium head and heart full of doubt and as i saw him walk out
    he glanced at me with a quick look of uncertainty
    as to why i kept glancing at all of his beauty
    i knew i would have reacted the same so it was kinda funny...

    :heart: :heart: PLAY :heart: :heart:
     
  2. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    why didn't you go for it!!!!???? :lol: I like this right here. Its a nice thing to break out of the writer's block with
     
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    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Aw gurl, I'm like SwtT on this one, why didn't you go for it? He might have actually wondered the same things about you. Well, what can you say it's the past now. I liked this. I felt like I knew him. You had a good sense of description in this one. I really, really loved it.

    Much luv,
    Foxy..........
     
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    blaquebutterfli Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hey - i think you broke out the block running! 1 thing though, why didn't you go for it?
     
  5. PlayWitItPimp05

    PlayWitItPimp05 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I don't know fam, guess I didn't have da heart...
    I'm kinda shy ya know... ;)
    Thanks for da love.

    :heart: :heart: PLAY :heart: :heart:
     
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    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    lol i like this...
     
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    Girl you had me sweatin just from the description...
    Dreadz too........airforce1's, I think I would had to make my move
    "What is Carolina feeding this man" had me goin on this one

    With the way your write.........shy?

    You always bring heat to the page,
    Much luv
    Angelic
     
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    Alizentang Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I agree wit angelic. We can always count on Play to bring some heat to the page:) Glad to see you back. I too am suffering from "the block" right now. Can't wait to hear more from you....

    SHHH! One of my favorites:)
     
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    MmmmmMMmmMMmmm....lol well I do suppose my sista that he at least inspired this one outa u :)
     
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    Beauty is in the eye, in MY eye you personify that embodiment of juicy and delicious, so don't delight in the wake of what YOU see.

    Next time just walk boldly, confront boldly, and conquer BOLDLY!!!

    Nice writing.
     
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