Black Poetry : ~Lennon Like~

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  1. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A keystyle I did a month ago. I did it while listenin "imagine", by John Lennon...


    sometimes i wish i could
    imagine like
    lennon...
    and maybe this stress could
    soothe in...
    away in my scarred
    skin...
    it's just a
    vision...

    a curse was brought
    upon me...
    because i lied to the devil
    once to many...
    and it seems like every corner i turn
    he's there...
    and he wont go...
    until he can taste
    my soul....
    but my wrist bled
    long ago...
    and my soul is just
    an echo...echo

    if that could be
    my intro...
    i'll have no complaints of my live
    being so short...
    or no regrets from changing
    my course...
    that's supposedly
    led to god...
    i cant help my
    prematue thoughts...
    **** it was the
    bible's fault...
    dark scriptures had me scared
    to talk...
    but if a book could change it's ways
    why was it wrong for me to change
    my walk...?
    my mother said because it will
    lead me to a path
    she choose...
    i saw the **** around
    her nose...
    i saw how she lost
    to blow...
    and died to something they still dont have
    an answer for...
    i hardly managed to make it out
    of that path...
    you'd think through all of that i would have found religon
    but a pew would never
    touch my ***...
    i want to hear
    a voice...
    because i dont have the faith
    to believe in
    written words...

    except mines...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    word up !!!! i feel ya here
     
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    Yes, that Lennon song does have a way of making the mind wander, and wonder. So many things can happen to a soul, that it just feels empty after a while. But there is hope in having a strong faith. This piece seemed to be deeply written from within.
     
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    wellfelt drop
    thanks for sharing....
    peace
    angel
     
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