Black Poetry : ))**Left With An Echoe**((

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  1. PropheticNsyght

    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Internet connection...
    the only means of communication.
    Both of us on opposite sides of the U.S
    You up north and me down south,.
    Meeting you brought a smile
    to my mouth.
    Your conversation...sweet.
    Your disposition...good enough to eat.
    You as a whole...someone I wanted to keep.
    See, our entire relationship was conducted by many emails,
    and phone calls complete with sweet smiles.
    I found myself diggin you and I know
    you dug me.
    Together we formed the perfect componet dipped in
    unity.
    How sweet it was to be.
    But with every beautiful sky, there is a storm bound to come up.
    We lost connection for a minute and things were never the same.
    Now you want me to write 'us' off as something that could have been.
    No hard feelings...
    No harsh words...
    Looking forward and never back.
    Moving ahead.
    But in the privacy of my inner, I shed tears silently because I can't...
    I can't write 'us' off.
    See, I love you papi and I truly need you in my life.
    Hello?
    Hello?
    Hello?
    Nothing, and when I finally turn around, I see that you've
    left me with only an echo.

    Copyright 2004
    PropheticNsyght
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    as the echoes flowing cross da maze in secret winds
    very nice
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Such a sadness in this conveyed, to feel you have so much, only to end up with an echo of what was. Keep the flows coming.
     
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    " But with every beautiful sky, there is a storm bound to come up.
    We lost connection for a minute and things were never the same.
    Now you want me to write 'us' off as something that could have been. "


    PropheticNsyght

    This is a lovely poem. :hot: :hot: :hot: :hot: :hot: It takes me away.
    To many thoughts and places. Deep very deep. Scream for your Papi. He hears the winds. The moon she is your friend, he won't get any sleep. She will pull at his pillow.
     
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    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I so appreciate the beauty of my families words! God is good and i appreciate you all deeply.
     
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    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    We appreciate your craft also poet. Keep the journey of your craft as deep as you will grow and have traveled. :pool:
     
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    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Papi your words mean so much to me. Thank you and much love!