Black Poetry : Last Priority

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by NapturallyYours, May 3, 2007.

  1. NapturallyYours

    NapturallyYours Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I’m so far down on your list of priorities
    That I don’t even think you know I exist the majority of the time
    I’m not even in your MySpace Top 8
    But who really cares about that
    I’m just your girlfriend
    Let’s see where I fit in:
    1. The Father
    2. The Son
    3. The Holy Spirit
    That already puts me in 4th place
    Not that I mind coming after God’s family
    I mean, it’s GOD!!
    Ok, so who or what’s next?
    Oh yeah, I should have guessed
    That beautiful product of your loins
    Well, that’s how it should be
    Your child should be above me
    5th place really wouldn’t be so bad,
    But after your 1st born come Mom and Dad
    Oh I forgot, you have a sister too
    And I know it’s not like you can quit your job
    You having steady employment is one thing I find attractive about you
    To round out the Top 10, would have to be school
    I can’t hate on the fact that a brother is trying to be educated
    And once you get your Master’s I’ll surely be elated
    When you walk off the stage, I’ll give you a kiss
    Because with that part over, I’ll move up on your list.
    What? You’re going to get your doctorate?
    Well fine, if I’m not in the Top 10
    I should at least be number eleven, right?
    Wrong! Now I have to contend with all of your friends
    Most of which you have known you since before me and you began
    Since I don’t know the exact summation
    I’ll use 20 for my calculation.
    Ok, so have ya’ll been keeping track of where I’m at?
    That’s right! You got it! I’m at 30!
    You thinking, what I’m thinking…that’s so low down and dirty
    I’m probably even lower on his list,
    But I don’t think I need to count any higher than this.
    Now I’m not saying that I expect to be first
    I just want to be treated with the respect I deserve
    He says he's so happy that I’m his woman and he’s my man
    Then whenever something comes up, he cancels our plans?
    I’m tired of being last, it’s over, and I’m done.
    Getting rid of him is my priority number 1.

    ©Napturally Yours
    May 3, 2007
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    word up sis from da scribe u a queen and should be at 4
    so far up but some how one think it's an joke
    time to blow reality smoke and float on ............keep expressing sis
     
  3. NapturallyYours

    NapturallyYours Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Rich...thanks! I always enjoy your comments!

    April
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes, somewhere within the top five should be where you stand. Some do forget how to treat a gem, his loss though. Always enjoy reading you.
     
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    Hey there Napturally:
    I don't blame you you should be
    much closer to the top
    I agree with sista watz
    Go head girl drop him
    like he's hot.

    Very nicely penned.

    Much Luv
     
  6. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ~Re-arranging Priorities~

    Let's take a stroll down this priority list,
    so I can point out, all the things you missed.

    Am I correct when they said I came from your rib?
    the same rib you needed, in order to live?

    Cause if that's the case, then your numbers are wrong,
    at the very top of your list is where I belong.

    I should be your "Heaven" ...right here on earth,
    if not, let your heart do, a serious search.

    The friends you hang with on the strip
    when the chips are down, don't they bounce quick?
    but ....
    It's to late to move the numbers where they really should be
    because at the end of this piece, ...I'll be history.​


    This is a great piece poet, I enjoyed flowing to it, keep dropping it sis.
     
  7. 4EVERLUV

    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Napturally:
    I had to come back and hit this thread again
    because Queen's flo back puts it all in the
    right perspective. Queen you flo that back for sure.
    Now Napturally go tell him that. Keep your head up girl.
     
  8. NapturallyYours

    NapturallyYours Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Lol...Thank you ladies! I see the fellas stayed away from this one for the most part. Except for Rich of course! I loved the flow back. You do it as only you can sister! Love you all!

    April
     
  9. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Right Nap,
    They did stay away from this thread...faaarrr away. smh
    they know they be jiggling dem numbers too. ...lol
     
  10. abstract219

    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    wow....that 's a great read...i followed it out to the end...

    i like the looseness...the form flows...

    would sound phenomenal performed live....

    deep write....real nice.....
     
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