Black Poetry : last night

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by redlady, Dec 6, 2002.

  1. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    last night you told me
    that i didn’t understand you
    what you were trying to do
    why you come at me the way that you do
    how all your intentions were for the good
    how you land as a black man
    extending your hand
    and if i didn’t understand
    then you married the wrong man

    last night i told you
    that i do understand you
    what you are trying to do
    but not why you come at me the way that you do
    how all your intentions are not always for the good
    look at where you land as a black man
    i accept your hand
    but if you can’t understand
    then you married the wrong woman
     
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    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    should be some replies to this

    nice work red
     
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    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wonderful soulful bittersweet piece!

    It took me a while to get here, but it was well worth the scroll, this was a beautifully profound poem that told a story in just a few words...laid down with a very smooth flow! Scribe it like you know!
    Blessings on Ya House!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well writen and well posed
     
  5. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ahhh, thank you so much for the feedback, i was begining to think i had lost my touch!
     
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