Black Poetry : Las Angelinas

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by river, Mar 29, 2004.

  1. river

    river Watch Her Flow MEMBER

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    I heard her important sounding boots on the pavement
    I didn't turn around but I knew it was a "her"
    It was a "her" sounding sound
    An important her
    Campared to the soft patter of my Sketchers
    It sounded like the approach of doom
    Somebody was going to be in big trouble
    Not me
    I kept walking
    Aqua Fina in one hand
    Umbrella in the other
    When I moved the umbrella rain slid off my upper lip
    And slipped into the bottle
    It was just a silly nonsensical Angelina thing
    Wearing tennis shoes and drinking water in the rain
    But it made me feel more important to the sky
    More important to the itinerary of water
    Than clunky heels and troubled minds
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    river this was tyte and well scribe
    i like the way u created the workmenship to this flow
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You really know how to work a pen. You just draw us all up into a scene with your words.
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was tight
    well posed
    flow on diggin this one
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    I was there..
    with your water images..
    rain water, drinking water
    both touching lips..
    you took me to mystery and apprehension
    and then you said "not me"
    and drank of the water..
    i loved this piece..
    wonderful
    thanks
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very touching flow
    yes
    very
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
  7. river

    river Watch Her Flow MEMBER

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    I never know til somebody tells me. Then I praise God. We will flow together, Bebe. Flow like water.