Black Poetry : ...labels. (working title)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by GA_Sunshyne, Feb 7, 2002.

  1. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    aight ya'll... this is my 1st attempt at "off da top" flowin'.
    you know... where you just type it & let it go! so be gentle! :D


    i’ve heard songs that say—

    I just wanna be…
    there's no need to put
    titles on you & me


    …&

    If we label this…
    then picture what we
    might lose


    & i have to agree
    ‘cause this thing between
    you & me transcends the
    ordinary… it’s much greater
    than others being able to
    characterize or typify
    us as just a couple…
    i mean you’re
    my brother
    my father
    my friend
    my lover
    sometimes you’re
    my sister (or)
    my mother
    other times
    you’re me (then)
    i am you
    (meanwhile our feelings grow)
    & i don’t want to ruin this…
    so lets just loving-ly exist
    side by side
    hearts & souls entwined
    until our time together
    expires or is required to
    renew itself… contInUoUS-ly
    (you feelin’ me?)



    © SunShyneOrygynals 2002, all rights reserved
     
  2. Danilyn

    Danilyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm feelin you! And to an extent I agree; however, without labels, u find yourself in a gray area with no defined boundaries and somebody's toes are bound to get stepped on. Loved what u did with this girlfriend. The poetic muse has taken root in your soul and we are all being blessed because of it! U know I love ya!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    smiling @ dis one

    sunshyne u just pose a piece of love
    thats hard to find i agree wit ya flava of flow
    write da scribe u vibe in my mental sistah!!:heart: :D
     
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    Ooooooohhh...

    yeah big sis PH...I'm feelin you!!:D

    :heart: Aminata
     
  5. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    AlwaysThanks.


    Dani. thanks lil sis for voicing your opinion on this
    piece... it was really an off da top thang... you know i neva
    post from work... but i was sitting at my desk listenin' to
    Balil... (track #13)... & this is what came out!! :heart:

    $$RICH-NE$$. thank you darlin'... i'm glad you
    enjoyed my flow!! you always make me shyne!! :heart:

    Afri. silly chile!! i know you know that i know...
    that you feelin' me!! when we love fa sho fa sho... we
    on't be needin' no titles! :D thanks sister dear!! :heart:
     
  6. UbZoRbShUn

    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ummm

    picture what we might loose... cool, cause I can dig it you know. why can't we just be ?????? that's how you get into areas you don't wanna go.



    One
     
  7. poeticdelight

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    ahhh snap!!!

    this was tyte sista'

    keep the faith

    peace

    pd
     
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    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    GA,

    "off da top"

    I'm digging it. See what you can do when you just "let it flow?" It's incredible isn't it?

    "10"

    verb
     
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    YOU BEEN LISTENIN TO BILAL!!
    AIN'T HE HOT, GIRL?
    anyway, this flow was tight
    and the title is sufficient!
    -7:spinstar:
     
  10. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    AlwaysThanks.


    Sherrie. thanks for the read sis... & yessss! i know
    you're a Bilal fan! i've decided it's ok for me to share! :lol:

    Seven. yes gurl! sunshyne luvsss her some Bilal!
    thanks for the read... glad you liked it! (& the title). :)

    MRB. dat off da top thang is kinda liberating! it was
    scarry for me to post it though. thanks for the "10"! :heart:

    PD. hey you!! :) thanks for the read. i'm extra glad
    that you enjoyed it!!

    Zorb-Shun. thanks for the read lil sis! "areas you
    don't wanna go"...??? how so? :D n e way! it's all love!
     
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