Black Poetry : Kisses in the Wind

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  1. sofasscotton

    sofasscotton Member MEMBER

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    As the wind blows through my mind
    chasing breezes of imaginary kisses...
    my love for you is deeper than yours for mine,
    A proven fact as we went through time.

    Watching burnt orange leaves fall from a tree of life
    as it whistles with the wind behind it
    it slowly hits the ground.
    depending on my water to help your roots produce and stay strong
    my well went dry.
    Images of laughter, bonds, and love still reply
    now i'm chasing breezes.

    As if in a relay, we pray
    that one day the rain from above
    will wash us as white and pure as a dove
    shown by real love.
    The problem with fiction and fact is
    fiction is past and fact is how we live.
    :hearts2:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    with facts we learn and feel and the fiction we leave behind
    well said nice message here and hold much love within
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Easier to see the blissful images, even if they are false. Eventually we allow ourselves to see the truth. This flowed so smoothly, flow on.
     
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    Naturally smooth...

    <floats in>

    First let me just say that I love when poetry is as much a visual delight as an emotional one. Second, I love the manifestation or use of nature something we all experience yet often pay very little attention to.
    Third, "now i'm chasing breezes." is my favorite line of the poem (every line was a delight to read but this one was just so profound to me). It adds weight to the last line of the poem...those two lines in themselves did it for me!

    Excellent work!

    keep the words moving

    peace&1luv

    <floats out>
     
  5. sofasscotton

    sofasscotton Member MEMBER

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    thanxs for the props on this peice.....i guess i was really thinking of my significant other and our relationship. i'm happy that you all can feel this peice.
     
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    AHMOSE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I can dig this piece poet thanks for sharing.
     
  7. sofasscotton

    sofasscotton Member MEMBER

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    thanx........im happy you enjoyed this peice.
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    been away and came back looking around...saw the title and
    stopped....
    i love your imagery and your use of nature...
    it flowed so well
    really really nice..
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice vibe enjoyed the flow
     
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    Tha-Emissary Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    All I can say is Wow! what a Voice and what a Word!
     
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