Black Poetry : Kissed

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by HighEmme, May 12, 2003.

  1. HighEmme

    HighEmme Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Kissed for the first time
    I felt my mind
    abandon me
    So gentle
    that my mental
    became merely a rental
    and this kiss
    was now my super
    This
    Heart racing
    Soul Shaking
    Capitivating
    Penetrating
    Elevating
    Kiss
    Speechless
    as my mind
    walloped in mental beaches
    similar to tasting
    the nectar
    of sweet peaches
    Tongues tussle
    Knees buckle
    Emotions huddle
    and form an alliance
    that only demands compliance
    and the only acceptable defiance
    is refusing to stop
     
  2. Joyce

    Joyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Innocently beautiful. It's extremely important to end the bottom of a poem at the top and my, my, my, did you do that real good with this...

    Tongues tussle
    Knees buckle
    Emotions huddle
    and form an alliance
    that only demands compliance
    and the only acceptable defiance
    is refusing to stop


    What an experience and you really put the poetics to it well.


    Thanks for sharing.

    Joyce
     
  3. kaly

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    kiss

    i could have described it better
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    u guideline it to perfection
    that first kiss was too sweet
    love dis flow
     
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    serenti-poet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    unlike Kaly I couldn't describe it any better than you did beautiful flow first kiss is always the best peace and blessins keep flowin
     
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    i like i like.....very good description(silently wishin her 1st kiss was like that) much love :)
     
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    Emme...

    Wow! Now this hea is ova da edge... no doubt! Lovin ya art!

    Reas
     
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    HighEmme Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks Joyce, Kaly, Rich, Poet, Sarcasm and Reas. Definitely glad that y'all are feelin this one. Thank you for the feed back, I appreciate that, I really need that....see, bout to start another flow :) it be's like that sometimes :)
     
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