Black Poetry : king david's cry....

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  1. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hope you all know the story of david and bathsheba. enjoy.

    this ray of light has never,
    day or night
    guided my eyes from my roof to such a sacred sight to behold
    seemingly a peace
    a serenity
    a divinity of all i have seen

    beauty in depth of your soul , i pierce

    more than an eye-sweeping notion
    as you bathe every inch of your body
    with delicate emotion as though you have never been..... rinsed
    i wonder if you have ever felt pure and cleansed....
    i desire you
    inquire of you....

    from there where i stood
    the skies had only a mere glance compared to you
    here is a chance i am willing to take
    how
    tell me how can my heart not ache at the thought of you being my lover
    even after i have found that you belong to another who is as my brother
    we give in to our sin
    it feels right to be wrong
    what song will i render to my God this time....

    "david, what shall i do
    how can you be with me and me with you"
    the line is no longer thin betwixt broken/fixed pleasure/pain
    sun/rain
    "Joab, put him, her husband in the battle most fierce."
    how will i be able to explain to my people and my God whose eyes sharply pierce"?

    of all of my sin to be made known, a sin it would be to not have her yet beside my throne...
    for with you i shall not bear my burdens alone




    bathsheba
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "...the heart is desperate...and treacherous."

    it's interesting the things we do to get the things we lust after.

    NICELY done, poet.
     
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    the best storyteller in the world

    good narrative poem

    pd :heart:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    hummm!! very well posed poet !!! loved da story
    more more more !!!!!!
     
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    wildflower7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    man, i LUV this flow. very well put. i think we should do more with bible stories.
    -7:spinstar:
     
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    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I did enjoy and thank you for sharing.

    Scribeaboutit! It helps.
    CCBSKYN :heart:
     
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    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The bible tells the best dramatic stories doesn’t it
    Thanks for bringing this one home poet
     
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    AACOOLDRE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i like this
     
  9. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanx for readin' me peeps.

    glad you liked.

    jh.
     
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