Black Poetry : Killed Unconscious

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  1. Soullyricist

    Soullyricist Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I remember seeing myself stand in my own mist of fear like I was drowning in an ocean of life, and I couldn’t send the message to my extremities to swim, to run or to speak up for myself.

    I understood the circumstance but couldn’t understand why I was in it, why it was my blood I was seeing and not some sad story in a book I wished I was reading.

    I relinquished to this man my life until I realized that he couldn’t save me from drowning in my ocean, he couldn’t save me from visually dissipating sight. He was no one but someone I made me. He was simply flesh who slept inside of my body.

    But I was so unconscious that I wouldn’t witness hell in front of my eyes. Instead I witnessed and claimed his decision as my eternal demise. I stood in my domain of fear waiting for vultures to devour me. My intestinal reality began to grasp me shaking me severely until I realized that the severity of my love situation wasn’t my true situation.

    “So this is why he’s displaying to everyone his reservations of loving me so boldly. He posses problems himself.” His situations mixed with my tribulations made nothing but what seemed like a massive demon structured constellation we stared at every night….me subconsciously, him consciously.


    I was dead with him I was without life. When I cried to bleed after witnessing his willingness to leave me like nothing, it was like rebirthing myself to the reality that if allowed, a man can kill you unconscious and God will remove him replace you and rebirth you Conscious.


    © Tawanda Roberson
     
  2. PlayWitItPimp05

    PlayWitItPimp05 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Now this is some knowledge for real!
    I was totally feelin ya flow!

    :heart: :heart: PLAY :heart: :heart:
     
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    Alizentang Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Now this is some deep a** ish!!!!!!!!!

    Well written and deeply felt!
     
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    Wow.............I'm speechless. Felt this flow!
     
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    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ........whoa........

    :jawdrop: dis is so deep syte, gurl flow on!!!!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    i mean dis was woooooweeeee! tyteeeeee!
    let ya pen flow
     
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