Black Poetry : keepin it real

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  1. Unforgettable

    Unforgettable Member MEMBER

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    you act like its all about the words that you u speak
    but when your actions dont support then that $hit gets weak
    to hear you say " i love you " makes my stomach turn
    im o.d-ing on tums cuz it makes my heart burn
    your voice plus those words used to drive me insane
    id melt like spring's icicle on the window pane
    it was all i needed and believed you were my soulmate
    it restored my belief in true love and fate
    now those words are a bad joke and im the punchline
    and it only gets less [email protected] funny over time
    my mistakes have only made me stronger
    but my heart is screamin I CANT DO THIS NO LONGER!
    im tried of feeling bad for keepin it real
    i cant stay,i cant leave, i dont know how to feel
    what little trust and faith i had left u destroyed
    and left me to clean it up so dont get annoyed
    i been hurt so many times and damnit u knew this!
    how can YOU pity YOU after pullin this bullshyt?
    u been such a mess and i tried to clean it up
    and what do i get.. left broke& f@&ked
    i sacrificed just as much as u did to be wit you
    but i lost alot more than i evea expected to
    i was sweet when i met u loving & i showed it
    after all i had been through that was tough & u know it
    im sayin goodbye & i was nevea a quitter..
    but wit the pain you've given me!? im officially bitter
    so i pity the next man who comes into my life
    gone have to beg , borrow & steal to get me to be nice
    all i pray for whoevea is the next man that calls
    GOD give him the strength to get past my new walls
     
  2. abstract219

    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    yes sir...God give him the strength!....a strong write sista...I enjoyed the rhyme schemes here...you just flowed for days on this one....i love the attitude of reclaiming your spirit....that's real

    a great write, Poet....keep em comin

     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    feeling all this , something i know very well ....flow on
     
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    Intrepid Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I am feeling your write all the pain and expression jumps right out.
    I feel for the next one too
    Time heals all though
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Unforgettable:
    I felt every word. Been there done that, not going back. But don't put them walls up too high. Your blessing might not be able to get over them.
    Really feeln' your flo
    Much Luv
     
  6. NapturallyYours

    NapturallyYours Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I can't believe I've never come across this piece of work before. It's fantastic, and let me tell you sis, my walls are pretty inpenetrable as well. Been there before. I complete feel this.
     
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