Black Poetry : Keep Me

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by CarrieMonet, Aug 10, 2004.

  1. CarrieMonet

    CarrieMonet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I stare at you
    So still
    Just lying there.

    Soon you will be awake
    On top
    Making me feel like a woman should.

    I long to feel
    Your body
    Thrusting hard, deep into mine.

    Feeling my hair
    My sweat
    My body thrusting back into you.

    You make me whole
    So complete
    You make me want to be a better person just for you.

    I'm falling hard
    For you
    And to answer a question, yes, you can keep me
     
  2. Alpha Male

    Alpha Male Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Reply to CarrieMonet

    CarrieMonet, you phrase what every man wants in his ear
    His formance has secured a fem.’s love, she needs his spear
    Thrusting rock, thrusting bottomless, thrusting her complete
    A woman that will say to the world he’s my lovable lover elite

    CarrieMonet, Seize the Day!
    Great Poem YOU have made!

    Please show me some of your love
    Today read and reply to my thread entitled:
    " Dear Alpha Male, please help me, signed the slave from torment land"
    Please tell me about my skills, tell me if their weak
    or show nuff real----------Thank You
    If you read and replied once!
    Do it again, kick up a notch!----------Thank you
     
  3. CarrieMonet

    CarrieMonet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you, I'll look for your poem...I'm not much of a critic though...
     
  4. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This clear and concise indeed. I loved the straight forward style here.
     
  5. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    word up dis was on hit
     
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