Black Poetry : JUST WALKING

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Ms_MochaB, Apr 1, 2005.

  1. Ms_MochaB

    Ms_MochaB Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I AM READY TO SCREAM ...
    DANG MAN, CAN'T YOU SEE I'M HURTNG RIGHT NOW
    AINT NO LOVE IN THIS HOUSE, SHOOT, I DON'T THINK LOVE EVER LIVED HERE
    WHY ARE YOU LOOKING AT ME LIKE, IM SUPPOSED TO KNOW WHAT YOU FEEL?

    YOU DON'T LET ME IN, THAT'S WHY I'M SHUTTING YOU OUT
    WHY CAN'T YOU SEE MY LOVE FOR WHAT IT REALLY IS, INSTEAD
    OF BASING IT ON YOUR FAILED RELATIONSHIPS?

    I AIN'T HER, SHE AIN'T ME, WE ARENT' THEM ...
    DANG MAN, CAN'T YOU SEE I LOVE YOU!
    NOT FOR WHAT YOU CAN GIVE ME OR WHAT YOU CAN DO FOR ME, BUT SIMPLY BECAUSE I DO.

    YOU LOOK AT ME CROSS, YOU SECOND GUESS MY MOVES, YOU YELL BECAUSE I EXPRESS EMOTIONS. I DON'T UNDERSTAND IT, BUT I KNOW HOW TO FIX IT.

    ... I'LL JUST WALK AND WALK AND WALK. I'LL SIT DOWN AND REST AND GATHER MY THOUGHTS, BUT THEN I'LL GET UP AND WALK AND WALK AND THEN WALK SOME MORE. I'LL WALK MY PAIN AWAY INSTEAD OF CRYING.

    THEN I'LL COME BACK HOME STRENGTHENED BY THE "ME" TIME, FILLING MYSELF WITH THE "GOOD" THINGS I LONG TO HEAR, AND JUST PLAIN OLD ENCOURAGED ... UNTIL THE NEXT TIME.

    ... AND THEN THE TIME AFTER THAT, AND THEN ONE DAY, MY WALKS WILL GET LONGER, AND I WILL GET STRONGER,

    UNTIL THAT ONE DAY WHEN THE LONG WALK WILL END IN A DRIVE ...
    AWAY FROM YOU.
     
  2. AHMOSE

    AHMOSE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The writer did a good job of expressing their pain in this piece. As I flow with this piece I want to tell her go leave whatever is making her walk alone.

    Good drop!
     
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    Whoa. I loved the in your face stance in this piece, and the way you described those baby steps leading into giant ones. Flow on then.
     
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    awesome flowing sweet release here !
     
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    :blowkiss: this was well written
     
  6. Ms_MochaB

    Ms_MochaB Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    THANK YOU! THANK YOU! THANK YOU!

    THANK YOU SO VERY MUCH FOR LOVE ... THIS WAS WRITTEN FROM MY HEART ... AGAIN I SAY THANKS
     
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    Ms. Mocha I really love ur poetry and i admire u and ur talents as well as a few other ppl. Keep doin wut u doin and imma keep readin! :donttell: :pie: :hearts4:
     
  8. Ms_MochaB

    Ms_MochaB Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    THANK YOU ... AND JUST AS YOU HAVE GIVEN ME INSPIRATION ... I SHALL IN TURN INSPIRE YOU ... THANKS AGAIN, :wchair: AFTER SOMETIME IN REMISSION I DIDN'T THINK THE GIFT WAS STILL IN ME ...
     
  9. Legendof_1_Spirit

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    U still got it...

    <floats in>

    Very engrossing and heartfelt, as if every feeling was/is worn right on the edge of the writer's sleeve and slowly dripped down into each keystroke.

    Loved the expression and the way it is expressed.

    Please continue to let your poetic gift illuminate this board.

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