Black Poetry : just typin off the top of my head

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by poeticlyspeakin, Feb 23, 2005.

  1. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Down one day, up the next
    A life story never written down in text
    But I'm still living and learning... building and crashing
    I wish I knew the reason behind my actions
    Frustrated completely, but I'm remaining calm
    Lord, sometimes I wish you could carry me in your palm
    Secure me in your possession; hide me in your hands
    Teach me how to walk in your word in a way I can understand
    Lonely... no. Afraid... yes, but I remain confident
    I know I'm a rebel without a cause looking forward to my consequence
    I am empty like a pumpkin 3 days after Halloween
    In search of happiness, but hollow is all tomorrow brings
    But not knowing is what keeps me fighting
    I'm living in a world of mistakes which keeps me igniting-
    A blunt to level my brain
    The fact that I’m still living, gives me a reason to not complain
    But I’m still in a state of confusion
    Moving...
    Without a sense of direction
    Just hoping I don’t fall and someday find correction
    For the nights that I’m living wrong
    Strong
    Enough to say no; enough to carry loads on my back
    But not strong enough to deny the women I attract
    It’s a f*cked up world, but men would love to at least tie my laces
    I party like its New Year’s Eve and f**king different women on a regular basis
    I lie to myself daily; asking for stability and love, but what for?
    Because when it’s handed to me, I throw it right back out the door
    I don’t know what I want, but I know I want more
    And if I don’t, then why does it eat me right down to the core?
    I was in a hurry to leave home, but now I’m in a hurry to return
    I’ve never been okay with change and I know that I need to learn
    Because life is full of them, but people would rather criticize than construct
    I don’t know how to and no one will show me, therefore I don’t give a f**k
    Well at least I try not to, but I also try not to erupt
    Because I hold in so much, too much, but my tears have been used up
    I’m walking around with no expression
    Giving everyone around me the wrong impression
    But that’s all I can do for now
    Until something or someone shows me how
    To smile, how to care, how to try
    Instead of letting everything I worked for pass me by
    I can’t lie
    I’m an arrogant *sshole
    Never been bashful
    Therefore I walk around with a chip bigger than a cheeto
    That’s me though
    But I cant change, if I don’t know how to man…
     
  2. 1poetsought

    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This earnest piece speaks of humanity as a whole. There is a void in all of us that must be filled. I've enjoyed your writing, thanks for sharing...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    the full expression we all as humans have a empty spot that must
    be covered in life tyte write ..............wow !!!!
     
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    peace,

    poeticlyspeakin, this is real fo' real..........like the open & honest vibe you presented off da dome! indeed that void is in all of us & I feel it will be there until we all unite as 1..............

    peace
     
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    poet...this piece was real as hell...
    i must say this joint stood out to me this morning....good ish gurl
    as long as you do not succumb to the void...the days will continue to get brighter
    as wisdom is manifested...word

    one love
    khasm
     
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    This piece showed despair and hope simultaneously. I think when we write about our pain, we find our solution. I really enjoyed the flow and the emotion in this piece. Great job!! :bowdown:
     
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    afrostotle Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Somber....yet hopeful....
    Nice contrast....

    One Love Poet
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This brings to mind a feeling of knowing there's an empty space, yearning to fill it, but afraid of what the space may end up being filled with. And the descript phrasing, just made this piece even more potent. Well written scribe.
     
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    the rollercoaster of emotions... right or wrong... leaves us numb.

    feel you all the way 4 real..
    jh.
     
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    May healing from the past and peace be yours. And as always, you are in my prayers.
     
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