Black Poetry : Just try

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by lyrix, Jun 23, 2003.

  1. lyrix

    lyrix New Member MEMBER

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    It's a simple fact
    It's a tap of your lips
    Cherish the kiss
    Open your gift
    see what's inside
    Don't hide the high
    To these rules which we abide
    As our law of life
    We live in strife
    Don't forget what I've given to you
    I'd take the day I'd seen your face
    and everything I'd put in place
    If you'd take the time to make it right
    I'd be that dime
    in which you hold in your pocket for life
    Just try.
     
  2. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very nice scribe...
     
  3. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was sweet.
     
  4. PlayWitItPimp05

    PlayWitItPimp05 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is a very inspirational piece...
    Something we should all tell ourselves every day...

    :heart: :heart: PLAY :heart: :heart:
     
  5. Rico

    Rico Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is nice.
     
  6. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sweet and simple. i likes... just try. good job, keep em comin... man i love poetry!!!
     
  7. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    O'my how i loved this flow here
    ya pen has much to say , let it continue to speak
    very nice
     
  8. skrybe7

    skrybe7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    feeliin' this flow, Poet.
     
  9. LibertyLady

    LibertyLady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes try tttt Try.....ttry ....(thinking of this little boy)
    i like this this is short but strong...
    keep writing ....
    much love liberty....
     
  10. verse

    verse Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    take the time to make it right...just try. powerful. nice flow.