Black Poetry : Just Take Me Back

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Take me back to where I was
    when I did something wrong
    You know, the thing I did to
    deserve this sorrowful song
    Must have been something
    mighty dramatic
    To have me twisting and turning
    like some sort of fanatic
    I don't know which way to turn,
    cause life is coming at me from all sides
    The river is murky and deep
    and fear is just flowing with the tides
    Perhaps I said the wrong thing
    or didn't have the right conversation with the Lord
    Or maybe I'm paying for what I did in a past life
    that my current life simply can't afford
    Did I have the wrong friends?
    Was I born on the wrong date?
    Did I not smile often enough?
    Did I choose the wrong mate?
    Is struggle and unhappiness
    destined to be my fate?
    Can someone give me a sign,
    or is it already too late?
    Whatever it was, return
    me there, same time same place
    I'll do it right this time,
    just let me plead my case
    Just take me back to where I was
    I promise, I'll right the wrong
    And hopefully then, they'll be
    an end to this, my sorrowful song.
     
  2. Vincy Ital

    Vincy Ital Active Member MEMBER

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    You just wrote my song.....

    Man oh man, do I know this feeling.......you laid it out well, deary, you laid it out well......when you find that happy place where you were, that Promised Land...take me there, will ya?...........nuthin but love for u, hun
     
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    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i kno the feelin to WATZ. This was a tyte drop. Keep up on doin ya thyng cuz i love ur poems. I have to admit im a fan!!! :deal: :spin:
     
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    Thanks for the love Vincy Ital. If i find it I will be sure to let you know sis.
    What a kind thing to say Blatinapoet4u, I enjoy reading your pieces as well. Thank you.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    felt all this and i've been on this song before
    expressing da tune
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you for letting me know that you "get" me on this Rich. Much appreciated.
     
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    FINDLOVEINME Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    THIS WAS SAD, BUT SO VERY TRUE, THANKS FOR SHARING
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes, sad but true, sometimes it helps to share, and sometimes....anywho, thank you for the response Findloveinme.
     
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    klabarron Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow Watz. This is true to life. Man if we could go back..... awesome flow Sis.
     
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    I am in complete Awe Sista!!!!
    Such deep emotions laced all
    up in this piece! Its a wonderful
    read and a pleasure to be reading!

    It makes me think back to a time
    when life seemed so brand new!

    Great read Sis!