Black Poetry : Just so U know!

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by THEONE, Feb 3, 2005.

  1. THEONE

    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Just so you know
    Its not only you
    I too
    Lay long nights
    Replaying what should have went through

    Baggerring myself on how things should have been
    You...........Me.......
    This life in general
    Blames placed
    Blames Taken
    Life's love so criminal

    You may think its you
    Who's cried
    Pleaded for things to change
    Life for me has been no different
    Resembling an unawakealble hellish dream

    I wish, As you wish
    WE only knew, how WE feel
    Loves not enough for you
    Loves all I got
    I guess Loves really what kills

    Perfect thoughs slaughtered
    by this imperfect world
    Hopes demolished
    Future unpolished
    emotions left in a whirl

    Now alone
    Just so you know, its not only U
    I too hold the perils of loves bad fruit!

    Unfin.
    THEONE
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    When a relationship takes a bad turn, you don't usually think of how the other person wishes that it would have worked out better too. I enjoyed this point of view TheOne. Flow on.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is awesome cause when you're in that situation, you tend to think it's only you who's feeling that way. Nice drop.
     
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    intense scribe Theone. Can't wait to read the finished version...keep the flow goin
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    feeling you here sometime the twist and turn of love runs
    a bad path surely u not alone i too have taste the sour fruit
    Tyte drop well felt THEONE
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was awesome you took me in with this one...but i digs ya stuff anyways tight drop ....Angel
     
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    I like it when I can relate to the flow of poetry
    I enjoyed this
     
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    naujae Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hey baby what's up i'm feeling you on this
     
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    :dance1: WOW, "LOVE'S BAD FRUIT" ... I'VE EATEN A PIECE OR TWO OF THAT ... AWESOME SCRIBE :hot:
     
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    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks poets, I appreciate the read from you extraordinary poetry people