Black Poetry : just my letter

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  1. MORE

    MORE Banned MEMBER

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    i should 've known
    when u went to the wedding , July 4th
    without me, that there would be suspicion lurking

    i should've known
    when your birthday fell, July 17th and u vanished
    on some "christian" retreat and came home
    not to anxious to see me, that something
    smelled like deceit

    i should've known when Vince crept in our bed
    u sent him up there
    to see what i would do
    but it was pitch black dark and i maintain
    my truth

    thought he, was u.

    i should've known when u'd be at the country clubs
    ur were really somewhere else u know
    i would not have
    approved of

    the sex wasn't good
    and now i know why
    but i still loved you
    despite all the lies

    i wanted so bad
    to see it work
    not another failed attempt to love
    put 6 feet in the dirt

    i wanted it like men
    want water in hell
    and i shed my own skin
    cause my loyalty is who i am

    but i should've known
    when leonard called too much
    that is was a set up
    he spoke words to keep in touch
    no thank you.

    what made u think
    i'd love them more than u
    that i'd sacrifice my hope and dreams
    and not make them come true?

    i cooked for you
    i licked your wounds and i swallowed you and
    my pride, and so much of what i ddn't like
    cause i thought u just had to learn
    how to love

    i accepted you fully never asked u to be
    something other than what time could
    allow you, to be, presently.

    but that was not enough and you
    criticized my heart and my love
    cast me out to the sea let
    raging waters carry me

    but its ok
    cause u will need those days
    when i caressed your head
    laying in my lap

    the days i cried out my soul,
    for you,
    a man
    who
    i thought
    i knew.
    and i
    a woman
    you were to stupid
    to know.:(
     
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    a man
    who
    i thought
    i knew.
    and i
    a woman
    you were to stupid
    to know.

    Very sweet MORE.. Give up that zero. Find a hero for your love.
    The best revenge is happiness.

    They say after you reach the bottom. You have to go up.

    Anger is action..get mad, get started. You know if you need us the Family is here for you..
     
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    this was beautiful...i know exactly what you're going through...why they do this i will never know but you expressed your pain from their actions so well..."i licked your wounds and i swallowed you and
    my pride"

    Exactly right!
     
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    a man
    who
    i thought
    i knew.
    and i
    a woman
    you were to stupid
    to know.
    ..well more i love this part....
    sometimes this is so true...
    loved the flow of this...
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    that last part was a killer...this was such a tyte flow gurl:)
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    i agree wit family....very nice flow
     
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    gee girl...you killin me softly with this one...but I agree wit Hodee the BEST revenge is happiness...becuase it realeases his hold of you and gives you back control...go get your happiness gurl :)
     
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    beautiful...
     
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    aw [email protected]
    tell him dat
    he was a stupid cat
    for come'n at you like dat
    like a durdy rat
    undercover mack
    use'n lies
    as alibies
    really stinks
    cause i see the flies....

    i appreciate your work the "more" i see it
    this was real

    peace
    khasm
     
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