Black Poetry : Just Die

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by soulful2006, Aug 12, 2005.

  1. soulful2006

    soulful2006 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Have you ever been so low
    That you could just die
    Like you were all out of tears and
    you had cried your last cry
    Like your chest would explode
    If you shed just one more tear
    So you begin to choke on them out of fear

    So that you thought not even Jesus could save you
    Like you wanted some body to come by and erase you
    Like you wanted to run but you were too weak
    So you stand and stare at the your two still feet

    I feel like I could just die
    Like I've cried my last cry
    Like not only everybody but my
    God has abandoned me
    The agony is so bad I can't sleep
    I've fallen so low that
    Words can not express
    The cold emptiness I feel in my chest
    In a crowded room but nobody
    Sees me
    My soul is so heavy that I can't breathe
    And I feel the pain
    Like rain keeps falling on my soul's
    Window pain

    I could just die from
    How I feel inside
    I could just die from askin'
    God why
    I could just from all my hidden grief
    Wishin' that before I let go
    Someone would come and help
    me off my knees


    Sometimes the pain I feel is just too much for my eyes have seen too much and I can not recover. So as I fall apart inside I realize that some days I wish I would just die. True Story.
    :cry: :cry: :cry: :crying: :crying: :bye: :help: :(
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    feeling all the depth of ya soul the pain that stain da heart
    yet i know above is a God who will mend and fix all one bare
    he cares
     
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    mzpoetic8705 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    YES!!!! I SO FEEL YOU ON THIS...man i feel like that all the time (is that a bad thing)...nice poem :)
     
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    soulful2006 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you Rich and mzpoetic I don't know if that's a bad thing or not I just think we feel every emotion very deeply so its impact on us is different.
     
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    soulful2006 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you for your reply Rich and mzpoetic I don't know if its bad or not I jus think we feel more deeply every emotion we encounter so its has a profound effect on the way we respond but that doesn't automatically spell out a bad thing.
     
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    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    been there, i feel your pain. Work through your emotions just keep writing.
     
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    this poem is amazing. i feel your pain.
     
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    I've been feeling like this for the last couple of months..great poem
     
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    Being the fantastic writer that you are, you have described this heinous feeling to a "T", and I'm sorry you have felt this way. I am using the past tense, cause I hope you're not still feeling like this. Know that God will help you make it through, inch by inch, second by second.
     
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    soulful2006 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you all for the responses every now and then I feel like this but its nothing that my God and I can't handle with a little help from the poetic mindset I have on the side. I'm equally glad that I was able to hit home with so many I understand what it is to experience pain that you can't control or let go of. My only advice is to keep your head up and your eye on the prize b/c that's what matters when its all said and done.