Black Poetry : Just Can't...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Chastity, Apr 12, 2004.

  1. Chastity

    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Can't go thru another year tryin
    to convince you that what I said was there
    isn't there anymore
    because when I told you it was there you wanted to move
    away from being here...
    with me...
    I can't let that happen...
    I barely survived...and so did my pride.
    As I can see myself again in that fetal position,
    ashamed of my love inflicted condition,
    presenting me with awkward addition:
    Tell you more + let you know = one
    Me standing by myself.
    Love is less, help is none.
    See what all is at stake?
    So I can't, just can't make,
    the same mistake....again.

     
  2. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    And I just can't blame you...
    Fool me once... it's on you...
    Fool me the second time...it's on me.
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    u laid it out in a unique way
     
  4. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Once is indeed enough, and your words brought that message home.
     
  5. THEONE

    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice piece, very smooth

     
  6. SensualReality

    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oooh I'm feelin this and a song coming on"I'm moooovin oooon" :lol: lol good write girl :read:
     
  7. cocobutterskyn

    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    your work is always awesome!!

    it surprises me there isn't more responses.


    I truly enjoyed this!


    feelin'it souldeep!
    Coco :heart:
     
  8. Chastity

    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey thanks a whole lot.....it's great to know that u think my work is awesome.....u see that right there....is what keeps me goin

    Much love
     
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