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Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by howardtsu, May 25, 2008.

  1. howardtsu

    howardtsu Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    to her naked eye I’m sweet and kind

    but when it comes to nudging me,

    my divinity fudge and me

    have yet to reach the happy regions of her mind

    [Howard wads up the paper and throws it away]

    no, that won’t work

    eve :

    honey, i'm home!!!!

    howard :

    i'm in the study dear

    let’s see

    to her naked eye I’m sweet and kind

    but when it comes to …. judging me …. hmmm …..

    when it comes to judging me …… her heart won’t forgive me

    …. I just need her to give me another chance …..

    but she won’t ….. my diamond would never …. no matter how clever i rhyme …

    this is forever ….

    eve :

    Howard, are you almost finished with your endeavor?

    howard :

    almost, sweetie

    [Howard takes another drink of lemon and lime]

    [then writes]

    ……….. to her naked eye I’m sweet and kind

    but when it comes to judging me …. her heart is harder than hardest diamond that’s ever been mined …… hmmm

    [from the other room]

    what did you say dear?

    howard :

    oh, nothing sweetheart

    but if she ever lets me exist, even in the furthest reaches of the happy regions of her mind

    [Howard sits back]

    pretty good


    [Eve sets a coke down]

    how's it going ?

    howard :

    just trying to get this last line to interwine with the others

    eve :

    here, let me see

    how about this?

    [Eve leans forward and writes]


    how's that?

    [Howard reads]

    that's perfect eve!!!!!!

    eve :

    that's easy to believe, isn't it?

    howard :

    of course baby


    [they leave the room]

    [5 minutes later]

    [2 mice scurry onto the table]

    mouse#1 :

    well, what does it say?

    mouse#2 :

    i'm looking, i'm looking

    ah yes ...

    [they both look]

    it’ll be easy to insist why looking past her “Milky Way” is the best source for reasons to exist i’ve been able to find

    So far

    [they look at each other]

    mouse#2 :

    maybe he's

    right








    love,

    eve & howard
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    as i peek in reading i find that just maybe the only way is to see through another window
    from the mindset and know of such love that has entered to embark the seen.

    great write as i watch Howard & Eve unfold .......I know the breakthrough is near.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Awwww, this was so sweet. I think howard has other things to tend to besides the poem... :)
     
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