Black Poetry : Just a little obsessed

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Jazz4u, Nov 21, 2003.

  1. Jazz4u

    Jazz4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If I didn’t love you I couldn’t write this

    I could probably count the ways I love you using the profound vocabulary my poetic cerebral process but intuitive burst of excitement exceed my need to proclaim Shakespearian babble when really I am challenged not to be reduced to a childlike tendency of presenting dandelions as a roses intensely grinning and all…
    I love you, not to be confused with some gargantuan explanation of the moon and stars never being as beautiful as you are because they might just be
    but
    not for long if God makes good on His promise, He’d make you for just one day shine a little bit brighter and if I signed the right contract it would count as one of His days and not mine, I figure 1,000 years to one day really does matter and while I developed finger cramps I’m keeping hope He is like everybody else and doesn’t pay attention to the small print I’ve added…p.s. our first born no longer belongs to us
    But knowing me, I would have to count in my sleep while dreaming of you but now I’m getting a little to mushy and have to tell you the truth I think about you on the toilet wandering why you would probably run screaming out saying “this is becoming a little tooooo uncomfortable” in which I’d reply “it’s only natural sweetie…” mumbling to myself “the love for you that is…”
    I’d giggle and straight out laugh to tears remembering the inside jokes we shared and the little secret notes placed in your coat and under your pillow and taped on the toilet seat so when you lifted it you could pee AND be thinking about me… okay as I admitted it than I’ll admit it now that last part kind of freak him out he informed me that not everything should be consider a multitasking opportunity
    In any event I’d proclaim in the most persistent tone that would rival the most successful street beggar that even in the mist of all my craziness I do it all cause I love you…
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was so sweet..
    enjoyed the read...:angel1:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was beautiful let ya love be known
     
  4. Jazz4u

    Jazz4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks ppl... :cool:
     
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    This read so easy, and comfortable, and sweet. I found myself smiling and nodding yes as I read through it. Very nice.
     
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    And now I’m obsessed with this piece…
    Jazz4u…great to see you back on the board…
    And wowing us immediately!
    Excellent composition!
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is lovely
    you indeed brought
    a smile to my face
    very nice
    Peace
     
  8. Jazz4u

    Jazz4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    aaawwww....i luv u guys/gals...lol :luv:
     
  9. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Just a little huh?? LOL now let me go and find some notes on my toilet seat...LOL I loved this it was true and deep in thought of your him.
     
  10. Jazz4u

    Jazz4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    justa write CP not really like this and even if i was you couldn't prove it :angel1:
     
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