Black Poetry : July 4th rant

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  1. asimplepoet

    asimplepoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    We celebrate our freedom, for freedom sake,
    However it is time for this country to awake.

    Awake from the intoxicating sleep that binds
    Remove from our sleepy eyes the enchantment that blinds,

    The eyes of a nation that is hailed as being the most powerful,
    but do we really have the true power, to me this seems doubtful,

    When will we learn to return to the concept of "Stop by America 1st",
    Why are we trying to help everyone else when we're hurting the worst.

    Our troops are fighting overseas,
    while families pray for their safe return on bended knees.

    Men and women putting their life on the line,
    So our freedom will remain in tact, but our freedom don't always feel so fine.

    We're still held captive by inequality, proverty, and mind sets of depression,
    Some feel they don't have a shot, unless they resort to using Smith & Wesson.

    Most aren't trying to create any problems you see,
    they just trying to stimulate their own economy.

    Stimulus checks spent before they even arrived,
    many shaking their head wondering how i'm suppose to survive.

    Its now a daily struggle and sacrifice,
    to stretch dollars for the food and gas price,

    Americans we have to keep pushing on,
    Even through stranglation hold of almighty Exxon,

    Change coming and Yes We can, get back on track,
    But its going to take a whole nation to take our real freedom back.

    No matter how things look or how they feel,
    We must keep our faith in a God who is real.

    He is still in control, contrary to want you make think,
    He still is able to change the situation faster than we can blink.

    So no matter who we nominate in November,
    We can't get to idealistic lest we forget and fail to remember..

    that this country will never get back to its former glory,
    Until it goes back to God's orginial intended story.

    So we celebrate the 4th and We celebrate our supposed freedom,
    But lets not forget to celebrate the Almighty God, cause we all need Him


    Asimplepoet and Manifested Revelation collaboration
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I enjoyed this entire piece, but that last line in particular, that was a direct hit. Appreciated the message, do flow on....
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Awesome write poet
     
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    Articulate piece of truth
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    yes we do poet

    yes we do need HIM

    peace

    great write

    such depth it ain't even funny

    peace
     
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    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The Greatest Show on Earth.. really?

    asimplepoet
    I enjoyd your 4th of July Rant
    It speaks volumes of truth. Keep flowing and shaing.

    " We're still held captive by inequality, proverty, and mind sets of depression,
    Some feel they don't have a shot, unless they resort to using Smith & Wesson. "


    I was thinking this morning. This is the greatest show on earth.
    You pinned it asimplepoet.


    " When will we learn to return to the concept of "Stop by America 1st"?

    Behind the curtain.
    See the show does go on.
    I haven’t seen it
    But I hear it is grand

    See them stand so noble
    Lofty
    Leaving them condescending
    Being stately
    Being imposing
    Being critical in fact.

    The show is dangerous
    It is unforgiving
    It is played up in many words

    It’s spectacular
    It is enormous
    Not all in stature
    Its missing compassion
    True sharing with the people
    Real community which is common care

    It is the people
    The ones at the bottom
    Holding up the show
    That the world sees and knows.

    Twisting ankles
    Weary arms
    I have wobbly buckling knees

    Do the show masters
    The Ring masters?
    Show promoters care … No
    Do they stop to let us breathe?

    No they whip
    Constantly whipping
    The Carriers of the lot.
    I haven’t seen it
    I just heard
    I just know from reading the plot

    That a great and majestic land
    Stands sprawled in front of me.

    Not safe to venture
    Too dangerous to travel because of the other participants
    They are selfish with the show

    They took it from others
    Won’t let them have it, won’t let them see it
    Won’t let me see it or participate in the future
    Don’t you know?

    How much of America have you ventured?
    As a person of color to see
    You can’t venture far from where we started
    That is Georgia or Tennessee

    Being Black in America or Native Indian
    Not included in what we, is built
    Have you seen the Grand Canyon, or Mount Rushmore?
    Or a close up look at a Petrified Tree? Never took these trips.

    Try and sneak a look and see
    Can’t venture out of certain doors
    Go around certain corners
    Can’t shop in certain stores

    The others participants of the greatest show
    Are selfish and ready to harm
    Giving grimace, dirty stares at the color of your face and arms

    But when they need us
    We go fighting again
    Another war and conflict to prove

    How much we care and love the queen.
    They have one
    We have one called Lady Liberty
    She stands in New York Harbor
    Looking inward back at me

    No not look outward
    Keeping watchful eye
    On terror and all the harm
    She looks inward and don’t see the suffering
    And that her own is causing harm

    This so called great majestic nation is broken
    They have, and I have never seen
    Forgotten nation of all there is

    Isn’t great
    Could never live up
    Or be great until it is shared

    With those who hold up the dream
    It is us the black people
    Who should be heralded?
    Held up high over every head

    Cherished and allowed
    To share greatest the scene
    A look behind the curtain
    Of the greatest show on earth.
    Now to me that would be “Stopping by America 1st".
     
  7. asimplepoet

    asimplepoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thought i'd pull this out the crates because it's just as true today as it was then. America I can't totally celebrate because I know that freedom isn't free and it's not complete
     
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