Black Haiku : Journey

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Gaylee, Nov 17, 2002.

  1. Gaylee

    Gaylee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Swiftly moving train
    thru the countryside so vast
    please bring my love back
     
  2. mkhaya lo'

    mkhaya lo' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I hope he returns with love a thousandfold...just as he left on the train and u watched it make its way into the distance, so I hope your love returns on that train-the love train!!! loooveellt one Gaylee!!

    lo'
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    self love within here
    da train is headed back home
    fill wit lots of love
     
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    Gaylee Nice Hiaku, If he was free, I am sure he woud come back.
     
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    Thank you Mkaha lo', $$RICH$$ and dojo54 for taking standing on the train station plattform with me here.
     
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    My first time really exploring HAIKUS...

    Really liked this one...

    My imagination can wander with this one...

    I can imagine everything from a mother watching her only son go off to war...

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    A woman whose man has decided to leave their small town for the big city life...

    It was wonderful...
     
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    Gaylee,

    You wrote an entire novel wit dese heah 17 thingys...how'd you do dat??? This is absolutely beautiful!!!

    Joyce
     
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