Black Poetry : Jevon

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  1. krazelyricks

    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Jevon

    J, is the name I call you
    Not that much taller than me but I still like you
    Since I met you
    You had a girl heart on lock
    And I hope this relationship can stand strong like a rock
    Tick-Tock-Tick- Tock
    That is the sound of the clock
    As it ticks the time when I’m not around you
    I want you
    Got to have you
    Every second that you’re gone is long over due
    Jevon
    I think you’re the one
    I can’t be certain though so I take it slow in run
    Time on the phone
    While we at home
    And touches and kisses when we in public makes me moan
    To this great man
    The man that I wished I had long ago at least as a friend
    But this is now and that is then
    And I got you now, I’m your woman
    So I promise to make this last
    I’m not the girl I once was, I’m not fast
    You changed me for the better and I hope that you’re my last
    Last man I ever care for, I don’t want this opportunity to pass
    Jevon
    My true love, the one
    Baby continue doing the things you do
    Because EVERYTHING you do keeps me loving you



    I wrote this about my boyfriend but because of my past drama with men I'm never going to give it to him. Funny thing is, he wrote me one the other day but I STILL won't give mine to him. I'm afraid.
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice piece, sounds kinda serious.
    but he may have been through worst
    but do whatever you feel comforable doing
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was warm , charming and real
    be not afraid of love and allow him
    to knoweth of your heart , give it to him

    nice write of what u feel and want ........
     
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    There always seems to be the most intresting stories behind poetry.... it's too bad he will never see this. I hope he understands you feel this way about him. Goodluck.
     
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    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for feeling this fam. Maybe one day he WILL see it. I don't know, maybe I can make it my part of my vows to him if we ever get married. He won't however ever see this poem before that day though because I don't want to look like a fool if we ever part ways.
     
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    When you put your heart on the line, it's always scary. Perhaps he will have the privilege of reading this endearing piece one day.
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    why not? what is your fear?
    you hold him dear
    why not share?

    what can he say or do?
    what will be best for you?
    to want and not dare
    take the step
    you know he cares...

    aah...but do you?

    think about it...


    i thank you for your poem...you inspired me...
     
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    Play it again... "JEVON"

    Time stood still in this for me, like a classic MOTOWN jam, GREAT WORK!!!
     
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    Wisdom7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice poem Krazelyrics! I'm sure you'll figure it out on whether to give it to him or not. We have faith in u! :rolling:
     
  10. Prizefighter16

    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i really dug this poem Kraze...im glad u were able to fully read ur feelings...cuz for me...it was confusing and scary, plus i haven't even graduated HS...so i don't even kno how im dealin wit them...


    but the outllook of ur poem was an inspiration..


    keep the flow goin

    Mz.soull aka prizefighter