Black Poetry : jellus of u....

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  1. daroc

    daroc Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    jellus of u....

    mine minds wanderin'
    thinking
    it thinks thots of thin
    nothings
    ...of heavy air floatin up...
    ...of clouds fallin wit da rain...
    my thots ride the sons rays
    as they bend and turn
    so do i
    its tied in a thosdand nots
    but yet im standin str8
    im held captive by my thots
    but i think freely
    i rise up
    when i stand
    but titled
    slanted
    by the way mine mind
    thrives and thinks
    it walks wit so much strength
    it glides so lightly but
    its pressence is so heavy
    heavenly sent
    im jellus of my mind
    for time it seems to find
    to always stop and think.....
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This poem took me in a different direction than I thought I would go. Time is limited, barely a chance to catch one's breath at times, I liked the creative way you brought this.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    u captrured a emotion inside me
    this was awesome writting
     
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    7thPoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this, to me, is poetry
    cause it had me questioning till the end
    and then you go...aahh...

    good job...keep writing
     
  5. daroc

    daroc Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    aaaaaaaaaaaawww... thanks yalll...i wasnt aticipatin those type of responses.. thanks fam
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very nice lay
    enjoyed the read
    thanks for sharing....Angel