Quiet Poetry Lounge : Jealous Of Your Skin

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by jazzymoonchild, Jul 1, 2004.

  1. jazzymoonchild

    jazzymoonchild Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I am jealous of your skin
    because it's closer to you
    than I can ever be

    Yes, it's true
    I'm secure in you and my heart
    is safe
    another woman, just wouldn't do
    No,....
    not for this jealousy

    I am jealous of your skin
    because it's closer to you
    than I can ever be

    It houses the very essence of you
    blood, muscles and veins
    arteries carrying more
    than just your
    lifeforce

    I am jealous of your skin

    because it's
    on top of you
    underneath you
    surrounds you
    with you always

    Because it's closer to you
    than I could ever be

    Your skin, ......
    how pretty it is
    bathed in moonlight
    or drenched in a lover's shower
    gleaming with our afterglow

    I am jealous of your skin

    but I treat it well....
    with massages and
    meticulous attention
    paid to each and every inch
    kiss, lick and bite

    so your skin plays well with me,
    responds...well to me,
    it's reactions cannot be hidden

    Because it is closer to you
    than I could ever be

    I am jealous of your skin


    and I will never hurt it,
    I treasure it
    protect it
    even in my state of
    sublimely green envy

    I am
    so...so

    jealous

    of your skin

    Because it is closer to you
    than I could ever be


    For though I press breasts
    against your chest,
    back to chest
    face to face
    lips to neck
    or thighs to shoulders,
    even raking my nails across
    the canvas of you
    I leave only superficial marks

    I'm jealous and I flare because

    your skin tenses when you do,
    knows your thoughts
    and feelings
    before I do
    so...

    I am second

    Because it is closer to you
    than I will ever be......

    I am jealous of your skin

    Sometimes when we're together,
    separated from the world,
    you and I
    poetry, music
    love and lust
    or
    delicious silence,
    I feel so close to you
    so close that I
    can hear your thoughts
    or feel your heart working
    in your chest
    but,
    I am second

    so....

    I am jealous
    only of your skin
    for nothing else is
    as close to you
    than me.


    jazzymoonchild, copyright @ July 2004
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow!!!!
    da depth and emotions flowin here
    was outstanding .....u know da skin touch
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like the way you laid this out, very original and different. I never thought of being second to skin before :huh: ...but you're right.
     
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    jazzymoonchild Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :toast: :toast: :toast:

    Thank you, $Rich$ and Queen! :bowdown:

    I was thinking about it today, no matter how close you get to someone, even laying next to them, you just can't get as close as their skin. But what a beautiful way to look at closeness, isn't it? ;)
     
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    This was such an inventive concept. Second to skin in closeness...wow. And the wording here was smooth like velvet. This was impressive!
     
  6. jazzymoonchild

    jazzymoonchild Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow, Sista Watz, thank you, thank you. I'm glad that it was received in the manner that I visioned it. I was a little stuck earlier. I hadn't written anything in a few weeks. Thanks again.... :fairy:
     
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    indeed it takes you inside
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    tight drop Poet
    i hear ya....
     
  9. jazzymoonchild

    jazzymoonchild Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you, Angel!!! Appreciate the support
     
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    7thPoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    as a connoisseur of fine wordation:)
    i found myself smiling all through this...
    you got mad skillz
     
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