Black Poetry : It's (un)Clear To Me

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Randee, Dec 12, 2003.

  1. Randee

    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Mourning the loss of you
    and you're still breathing,
    eating, shi^^ing, sleeping
    (with who (not that I care)?)
    You say, no, no, that's not it,
    just some things I am going through . . .
    You said at the beginning we would always be friends
    but, what does that mean when
    whenever or however i need you
    we're on borrowed time
    (that you always end).
    It's been three weeks since I have heard from you
    (without me calling you,
    questioning why you don't call me)
    so its obvious other than (financial) obligations you made
    (and already $$$spent$$$)
    you want nothing to do with me
    so my options seem limited in what I can do
    its not like we were ever committed
    to eachother, (more like I was in . . .
    what. . .not love or lust, maybe admiration of you
    and your style and ways, and now I don't know why)
    all i know is everytime I look at the phone
    my stomach turns in knots
    wondering what it was I didn't give you
    to make you love me. . .
    maybe love and trust. . .
    neither which you deserved from me anyway.
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    whoaaaaaaaaaa!!
    felt dis here indeed
    flow on now !
     
  3. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oh this was deep
    nice write please flow on....:angel1:
     
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    oh, sweetie. I am really really feelin this one. that ish hurts so bad, doesn't it. :grouphug: Stay strong and keep reminding yourself that it's his problem, not yours. It wasn't your failure to give what was necessary, but a flaw in him. He is dogging you, and you deserve so much more respect than that. Much love to you.

    ps - this is tight
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Goodness knows I've been there, and sometimes it feels like the swift kick that never ends..but it does at some point. Like the way you put this together.
     
  6. Randee

    Randee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :spank:
    and still i let him get to me, i will alwyas love him, but i don't have to like him any longer
     
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    true love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    So so true, you can love him all you want, but you don't have to like him. Your poem was so real and I know exactly where you're coming from with it. Been there done that. Much love to you.
     
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    yeah i hear ya
    love can be durdy...
    but stay tru
    and you'll get da clean
    queens always do...
    one love
    khasm
     
  9. Hiclass_female

    Hiclass_female Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I am definitly there with you.
    Loving this flow
    Keep it coming.