Khasm13 : it's over with...

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  1. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    it's over with....
    so why you still up on my tip
    it's over with....
    so why do you still think that you can flip da scipt
    it's over with...
    i got mines and don't plan to slip
    it's over with...
    it's over with...

    hey you....
    yeah you...
    why you try'n to come at me brand new
    all up out of the blue
    with some...i miss you...i still love you
    but when i was with you
    you were more grimey then warthogs in a zoo
    no...i don't have anyone else...
    but i'm thru with you
    you kept my moms crystal out of spite
    but despite all your hater ish...i don't have time to fight
    it was a wasted plight...i tried to do what was right
    but in hindsight...i see your just not the type
    excuse me...
    i meant your not my type...the type that doesn't fall for the hype
    the type that can argue without screamin all night
    the type that has at least a lil internal sight
    but all you can say now is that i'm not right
    cause i don't wanna take a bite and at least be friends
    but do you know what i really think?
    i think you wanna be my friend
    cause you got kicked out da crib and you have no ends
    sorry...i got no scratch for someone so detached from reality
    cause when the dust settled...it was you not me that suffered mad casualties
    now your try'n to dazzle me...frazzle me...talkin bout da past and battle'n me
    gurl...simply it was not meant to be...it doesn't take big brother to see
    that i don't have you...and you don't have me
    go ask barney...cause he'll tell you the same
    grow up and be a woman...stop playing that temperamental get that money game thas so lame
    but yet in your mind i'm the one too blame
    for shame...take a look in da mirror...i did
    thas why when you tried to repair with some savoir-faire...i slid
    cause it's over with...and it really was never anything big...you dig?


    it's over with....
    so why you still up on my tip
    it's over with....
    so why do you still think that you can flip da scipt
    it's over with...
    i got mines and don't plan to slip
    it's over with...
    it's over with...
     
  2. Poetic Justice

    Poetic Justice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Your like the James Earl Jones of poetry, meaning your writing is so powerful and always appreciated.
    Stands out, means something, always can relate to, with enough emotion and truth to make the hair stand on your hair.
     
  3. MANASIAC

    MANASIAC Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This poem is a great refelction of what rhyme, a great theme, and visual imagery can do to the reader and writer of a poem.

    As Angelic Says, this is a Soul Scribe, not a poem...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    on point and u spelled it out clear (it's ova )
    this took me in and lead me to the truth of the matter
    man Khasm str8 up tyte wit expressing meanings flow head!
     
  5. tzevi1278

    tzevi1278 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    it's ova, cause you killed this. ill flow and very well written. keep inkin' em

    Lyr1c
     
  6. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Now you're comin from the power position, brothah. I have been to this place, and you slammed it down to the ground. Daps fo this.
     
  7. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Some folks don't miss their water til there well runs dry, seems to be the case here. This was poetically straight to the point. And how do folks in this situation remain friends any way? Flow on.
     
  8. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    dang its like that wow...you know i know this was some ish right here...you brought it and laid it clear...shoot maybe she need a letter or she dont understand english....flow head on this was on point....Angel
     
  9. angelicsage

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    whew...you sure channeled some energy
    into this flow...and the repetition just
    drove the message home...
    it drilled it in...supported itself...
    drilled some more...and then blew up
    the very thought...that she could
    ever have you back...

    hindsight is always 20/20
    somebody betta recognize

    u put it down...
    1luv
    Sage
     
  10. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    khasm...that's a song if i ever heard one..
    with catch at that..
    nothing more powerful...than music..
    keep flowing..or should i leave out the g?(smile)