Black Poetry : ~It's Ova~

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  1. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Her eyes were as
    cold as death
    her tears fell until
    there were none
    left...

    she couldn't say the words
    her heart was
    tryin to form
    she shooked her head
    and backed away
    as i reached for her arms
    i wanted to say
    sorry
    but my words faded
    in the air,
    when she screamed, "it's ova!"
    so loud and
    clear
    we both stood there
    she was shocked
    she said
    i was dying
    i couldn't believe
    i heard it
    she looked, into my empty eyes
    i knew she
    wanted to re-word it
    but the damage was already done
    and i guess, i deserved it
    the skies were black
    with no stars....
    we stood inches away
    but yet, we seemed
    so afar...
    the wind grew
    cold...and blew
    her hair
    into her face
    she struggled to get it
    out the way
    as i began to
    say...
    but she put her finger
    to her lips...
    i looked in awe
    mouth still open
    her eyes, that were once so beautiful
    were no longer the same...
    she walked slowly
    towards me
    and said, "one last time"
    she kissed me
    gently
    then she turned
    to leave me
    dying....

    one luv, i said
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    as she turn away
    in her mind
    their was something to say
    her love yet warm
    bright and new
    deep inside
    she had to do it

    ya heart felt cold
    her love was bold
    ya eyez see into and far
    she was ya shinning star

    reach out continue
    ya one love , i said !

    very nice flow with much depth .............
     
  3. lpoet

    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    what up kid see u on the net too

    they took my aol from me at work cant even download that **** no more

    ****ed up huh

    nice post, already told u it was dope

    what u think bout me being poet of the week
    surprised the **** out of me

    holla at ya boy
     
  4. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yeah dog i envy you lp
    lol
     
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    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Loved this poem!

    This poem reached out and touched me whrere I live!
    It is something I can relate to, and you laid it out so well!
    Keep on doing what ya doing...EXCELLENT!

    Blessings On Ya House!
     
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    LURK Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    NICE THREAD MAN...
    I WAS FEELIN THIS HARD LIKE I KNO HOW THAT SHHH IZ...
    SOMETIMES YA GOTTA JUST LET LUV GO...
    IF IT COMES BACK U KNO IT WAS MEANT TA BE....IF NOT,
    THERES PLENTY OF OTHA FISHES IN THA SEA....


    ONE
     
  7. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    you sounded suprise
    there were no signs of mutiny
    before she screamed it's ova

    **** sometimes in love we are the last to know

    DSS
     
  8. Dream Weaver

    Dream Weaver Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    True, we always last to kno